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Hello, ..Would you please take a look at the following:"I plan on doing Master's in the USA, and Harvard is for me a very tempting choice as to that end"Is the above statement correct?Thanks.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

I plan on doing my master's in the US, and Harvard is a very tempting choice.

Surfer · Answer

Thanks, MM.

But the way I wrote it:
"I plan on doing Master's in the USA, and Harvard is for me a very tempting choice as to that end",

is it technically/grammatically wrong, or is it, for example, a matter of being unnatural or unnecessarily lengthy?

Appreciated.

BarbaraPA · Answer

SurferThanks, MM.But the way I wrote it:"I plan on doing Master's in the USA, and Harvard is for me a very tempting choice as to that end",is it technically/grammatically wrong, or is it, for example, a matter of being unnatural or unnecessarily lengthy?Appreciated.

There are parts that are wrong:
doing Master's -- wrong.
doing my master's -- right

as to that end -- wrong
to that end -- right

There is MUCH that is unnatural and unnecessarily lengthy -
for me - who else are we talking about, if not you?
to that end - what else are we talking about, if not obtaining your masters?

I strongly advise you to use Mr. M's version.

Clive · Answer

If something is a tempting choice, it mans that you have not yet decided to choose it.
eg The chocolate donut is a tempting choice. So is the jam one.

Thus, it would not be good to say Harvard is for me a very tempting choice if you are actually writing an application to Harvard.

Clive

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