proof reading needed ( cama splices)

I need some helps on cama splices and grammatical part please.
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In 2334 BCE, the great ruler, Sargon of Akkad captured the cities of Sumer, and all of its cities were under the rule of him. Akkadians were near eastern people, and they were Semitic. They had their own language, but they used Sumerian writing form which was cuneiform. Naram-sin who was Sargon’s grandson in 2254-2218BCE had a great power. He reigned after his uncle Rimush and his father Manishtusu (museum Louver). He claimed that he is a universal monarch and called himself as a “King of the Four Quarters”. Also, he was the first king to claim divinity in Mesopotamia art. There is lots of Mesopotamia art that had worked on stone, and one of this impressive art works is “Victory stele of Naram-Sin’. Naram-Sin has a stele that commemorates the victory over the Lullubi, a people of Iranian mountains to the east. “Victory Stele of Naram-Sin” is made by ink sandstone and is approximately 6’ 7’’ height. This stele which set up at Sippar depicts the power of Naram-Sin. On the stele, the king depicts larger and higher up the mountain than anyone else. That shows he is the important and powerful person in the picture. He is climbing a wooded mountain and leading his troop up a mountain. The king stands alone, and he is walking on two fallen bodies of the enemies which are begging for mercy and forgiveness. Naram-Sin wears a horned helmet which bears he is God as well as king. In addition there are three stars on the top that seem to be shining on his victory. Because his is standing on the top of the mountain it means that he is pretty close to the heavens. His troop march up in a gentle manner and it shows their respect and obedience to him. On the other hand, the enemy’s army runs away in disarray. The sculptor repeated the old rule such as composite view and frontal tow horns helmet on the king profile’s head. In 1157 BCE an Elamite king captured the Sippar and took the stele as booty back to Susa where it was found. Also, he added another inscription beside one that existing before to declare his honor, and to shows he carried off the stele after pillage of Sippar (museum Louvre). Akkadian power went to end by a mountain people, the Gutians in 2150 BCE.