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Dear John,
On Thursday May 18, 2006 you contacted me regarding the Ruidoso property. You informed me that you and Lisa have decided you want to sell the property. You went on to inform me that you have talked to several realtors in Ruidoso but you have not decided which one you will be listing the property with. You went on to say that Keely told you in a conversation you had with him the prior week, that I have a friend in El Paso that might be interested in purchasing the property. What Keely had told you and what I reiterated to you on Thursday was that it was a possibility that my friend might be interested in buying your interest in the property. It was just a thought and I have not spoken to my friend regarding the property and I do not know if she might have an interest in purchasing a share of the property. I also informed you that Keely and I are prepared to make you the same offer you had made mom prior to her passing and that you have since offered to us through conversations with Keely. The offer being $10,000 for your interest in the property…again…the same offer you made to us previously.
During our conversation Thursday, I explained that because of the emotional strains Keely and I have been under due to moms passing less than three months ago and with the fact we are both expecting a baby in the next few months, it is a very bad time for us to be making a decision about the property. We simply need some time. Therefore, as I stated to you, Keely and I do not desire to sell the property at this time.
We cannot help but feel you are attempting to take complete control of all matters concerning the property. At no time on Thursday did you ever even acknowledge the fact that Keely and I have an interest in the Ruidoso property. Every one of your statements to me was in complete disregard to that fact. i.e. “Lisa and I have decided to sell the property”; “I have talked to several realtors but I haven’t decided which one to go with”, and immediately prior to you hanging up on me, “We are selling that property!”
We do not fully understand your sudden urgency to sell the property after it has been in the family for such a long time and during a time that is very difficult for Keely and me. All the same, Keely and I are more than willing to try and reach an agreement with you that will work for all of us. Options perhaps we could consider would be buying out your interest or renting the property on a 6, 9, or 12 month lease in order to cover the current monthly obligations while giving me and Keely the additional time we need.
Again, it is our desire to work with you to reach a mutual agreement. We certainly hope you are willing to do the same.
Sincerely,
Dear John,
On Thursday May 18, 2006 you contacted me regarding the Ruidoso property. You informed me that you and Lisa have decided you want to sell the property. You went on to inform me that you have talked to several realtors in Ruidoso but you have not decided which one you will be listing the property with. You went on to say that Keely told you in a conversation you had with him the prior week, that I have a friend in El Paso that might be interested in purchasing the property. What Keely had told you and what I reiterated to you on Thursday was that it was a possibility that my friend might be interested in buying your interest in the property. It was just a thought and I have not spoken to my friend regarding the property and I do not know if she might have an interest in purchasing a share of the property. I also informed you that Keely and I are prepared to make you the same offer you had made mom prior to her passing and that you have since offered to us through conversations with Keely. The offer being $10,000 for your interest in the property…again…the same offer you made to us previously.
During our conversation Thursday, I explained that because of the emotional strains Keely and I have been under due to moms passing less than three months ago and with the fact we are both expecting a baby in the next few months, it is a very bad time for us to be making a decision about the property. We simply need some time. Therefore, as I stated to you, Keely and I do not desire to sell the property at this time.
We cannot help but feel you are attempting to take complete control of all matters concerning the property. At no time on Thursday did you ever even acknowledge the fact that Keely and I have an interest in the Ruidoso property. Every one of your statements to me was in complete disregard to that fact. i.e. “Lisa and I have decided to sell the property”; “I have talked to several realtors but I haven’t decided which one to go with”, and immediately prior to you hanging up on me, “We are selling that property!”
We do not fully understand your sudden urgency to sell the property after it has been in the family for such a long time and during a time that is very difficult for Keely and me. All the same, Keely and I are more than willing to try and reach an agreement with you that will work for all of us. Options perhaps we could consider would be buying out your interest or renting the property on a 6, 9, or 12 month lease in order to cover the current monthly obligations while giving me and Keely the additional time we need.
Again, it is our desire to work with you to reach a mutual agreement. We certainly hope you are willing to do the same.
Sincerely,
Top answer
The letter sounds ok. Also sounds like a very sad and difficult situation for you all. Is this john also a relative?
- The letter sounds ok.
- Also sounds like a very sad and difficult situation for you all.
- Is this john also a relative?
- Perhaps you might get a better response if you put a more positive spin on your offer.
- For example: Keely and I realise that you are keen receive your share of the property's value as soon as possible.
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The letter sounds ok.
Also sounds like a very sad and difficult situation for you all. Is this john also a relative?
Perhaps you might get a better response if you put a more positive spin on your offer. For example: Keely and I realise that you are keen receive your share of the property's value as soon as possible. The quickest way for us to achieve this would be for
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