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What was there she could do to us ? We were not living in Middle Ages. She could not burn you with sticks or torture you to a rack. Nowsaday, we had laws to protect us. Besides she was just a fifty-five year old woman with big red lips. Then, Harding said that a device which was a electric chair might do the work of a pill. After one electrical shock treatment, you might never want another. Everyone was scared becasue they were rabbits except Eddie. Everyone thought Eddie was a wolf. He sounded like a wolf when he laughed. The State put him away to the Creek hosptial because he had psychopathic tendencies.

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Marius Hancu · Accepted Answer

I think this is torture on the rack

What was there she could do to us ? We were not living in Middle Ages. She could not burn you with sticks or torture you to a rack. Nowsaday, we had laws to protect us. Besides she was just a fifty-five year old woman with big red lips. Then, Harding said that a device which was a electric chair might do the work of a pill. After one electrical shock treatment, you might never want another. Everyone was scared becasue they were rabbits except Eddie. Everyone thought Eddie was a wolf. He sounded like a wolf when he laughed. The State put him away to the Creek hosptial because he had psychopathic tendencies.

Thank you, who fixed the last proof reading.

MellaK · Answer

What was there she could do to us ? We were not living in Middle Ages. She could not burn you with sticks or torture you to a rack. Nowsaday, we had laws to protect us. Besides she was just a fifty-five year old woman with big red lips. Then, Harding said that a device which was a electric chair might do the work of a pill. After one electrical shock treatment, you might never want another. Everyone was scared because they were rabbits except Eddie. Everyone thought Eddie was a wolf. He sounded like a wolf when he laughed. The State put him away to the Creek hospital because he had psychopathic tendencies.

I'm not completely happy with the opening sentence--if I were writing it, I'd simply say: "What could she do to us?" Perhaps the author intends it to be this formal.

Just to note that some teachers encourage students to write less formally and so, in this case, "were not" and "could not" could be made into contractions. Some books instruct that "year-old" should be hyphenated.

Hope this helps.

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