Pronunciation and flow.

I'm going to have a book talk with my teacher in a few days, he is going to listen to me when I describe a few essential characters out of the book Call of The Wild. I've heared from others native speakers that it's hard to understand my accent so I've tried to reduce it, so I just want to make sure that my pronunciation and flow are OK for the book talk.  I've enclosed a short recording below, and will most likly post another later. I appreciate your help!!