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Anonymous Posted 18 years ago
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Pronoun usage

is the pronoun usage in the following sentence correct?

Cotrolaò consistently uses verbal communication to assert control over others; thus, his regret over “both the tone of his voice and his inability to control his own tongue” towards Castelli is due to his failure to control him, rather than any offense that Castelli might have taken over Cotrolaò’s harsh words.
  

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Hi, is the pronoun usage in the following sentence correct? Cotrolaò consistently uses verbal communication to assert control over others; thus, his regret over “both the tone of his voice and his inability to control his own tongue” towards Castelli is due to his failure to control him, rather than any offense that Castelli might have taken over Cotrolaò’s harsh words. It seems clear to me.

  • Hi, is the pronoun usage in the following sentence correct?
  • Cotrolaò consistently uses verbal communication to assert control over others; thus, his regret over “both the tone of his voice and his inability to control his own tongue” towards Castelli is due to his failure to control him, rather than any offense that Castelli might have taken over Cotrolaò’s harsh words.
  • It seems clear to me.
  • If you want to make it even clearer, you could say this.
  • Cotrolaò consistently uses verbal communication to assert control over others; thus, his regret over “both the tone of his voice and his inability to control his own tongue” towards Castelli is due to his failure to control him Castelli , rather than any offense that Castelli might have taken over Cotrolaò’s harsh words.
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Hi,
is the pronoun usage in the following sentence correct?

Cotrolaò consistently uses verbal communication to assert control over others; thus, his regret over “both the tone of his voice and his inability to control his own tongue” towards Castelli is due to his failure to control him, rather than any offense that Castelli might have taken over Cotrolaò’s harsh words.

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I'm not sure who's trying to control whom. I'm assuming you want the reflexive "his failure to control himself."

Up to that point, the pronouns clearly would all be taken to refer to Cotrolao, since Castelli has not yet been introduced. (The previous sentence may present some ambiguity. How can I know?)

My major objection is that "toward Castelli" comes out of the blue

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