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Pokh Posted 15 years ago
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Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, capitalised on her keen observation and love of the natural world.
In her book illustrations, which she carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter capitalized on her keen observation and love of the natural world.
Ets says above sentence is awkward .....and choses the second one... Its really going over my head... Is it just a matter of a style or the pronoun used in one phrase cannot refer to the noun in other phrase? Or are there any other problem in the first sentence...Please help me out... Can someone give me a link to the resources for writing styles?
In her book illustrations, which she carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter capitalized on her keen observation and love of the natural world.
Ets says above sentence is awkward .....and choses the second one... Its really going over my head... Is it just a matter of a style or the pronoun used in one phrase cannot refer to the noun in other phrase? Or are there any other problem in the first sentence...Please help me out... Can someone give me a link to the resources for writing styles?
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I believe it mostly to be a matter of style. Having two clauses ( in her book illustrations and carefully coordinating them with her narratives ) separates the sentence into too many pieces which can cause confusion to the reader. This becomes inefficient in that you may have to read the sentence a few times to get it.
- I believe it mostly to be a matter of style.
- Having two clauses ( in her book illustrations and carefully coordinating them with her narratives ) separates the sentence into too many pieces which can cause confusion to the reader.
- This becomes inefficient in that you may have to read the sentence a few times to get it.
- I think the first sentence makes sense after reading it carefully and pausing properly at the commas, but the second is much more direct and understandable the first time around.
- I am sure someone with more teaching skills than I can explain the answer more logically!
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I believe it mostly to be a matter of style. Having two clauses (in her book illustrations and carefully coordinating them with her narratives) separates the sentence into too many pieces which can cause confusion to the reader. This becomes inefficient in that you may have to read the sentence a few times to get it. I think the first se
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