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Baris Sarac Posted 14 years ago
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Process essay my travel to Chicago

Hi everyone;

Here is my process essay draft and blue colored words are academic words that I have to use 10 of them here. I really would like to know how to improve my writing skills so I would be appreciated anybody in anyway could help me.

Thank you.

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Adventurous Journey to New Hopes

My adventurous journey to Chicago is changed most of the things in my life. Being a person with big hopes played big role on my decision, because Chicago was a big potential education benefit for me. Therefore, at first the reason behind my decision is to achieve my major goals. There wasn`t any other way for me than going to Chicago, because my brother was there. Although, leaving my parents behind me was the hardest and most hurtful part of it. However, I had to make changes in my life for my future. I`ve never had experience which I had hard time and good time at the same time.

Leaving my home country was something that I had thought about, so it was exciting for me. I had many goals to achievein my mind. There wasn`t any other way for me than going to Chicago. As soon as I got my student visa in the mail, I purchased my plane ticket to Chicago. I also am learned a lot about Chicago during my last visits.

The moment that I went to the Ataturk Airport was the hardest and slowest. My ticket was a round-trip ticket. I was going to be heading to the London Heathrow Airport then transfer to Chicago O`hair plane. The personnel who helped me with my luggage told me that Heathrow is one of the world`s biggest airport and it`s also can be very confusing. That was exactly what my mom repeatedly reminded me even though I said that there must be airport maps available in every corner.

I felt relieved when I arrived to Chicago, and it was time to go to my school and get involved with other people. I still can`t explain how good I felt when plane`s tires touched the ground. I assumed to get used to people faster, but it wasn`t that easy because of my English. The city wasn`t too complex at all to explore, so it didn`t take my too much time.

Overall, my travel to Chicago was unforgettable. I still remember how happy I was once I get there. It felt longest plane trip ever but it worth. Now, if I were to evaluate my feelings of Chicago, I would say it is still exciting but not as much as it used to be.



Baris Sarac
  

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Hi Baris; What are the 10 "academic" words that you used? I have highlighted some mistakes for you. My adventurous journey to Chicago is changed most of the things in my life.

  • Hi Baris; What are the 10 "academic" words that you used?
  • I have highlighted some mistakes for you.
  • My adventurous journey to Chicago is changed most of the things in my life.
  • Being a person with big hopes played a big role in my decision, because Chicago was a big potential education benefit for me.
  • ) behind my decision is to achieve my major goals.
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Hi Baris;

What are the 10 "academic" words that you used?
I have highlighted some mistakes for you.

My adventurous journey to Chicago is changed most of the things in my life. Being a person with big hopes played a big role in my decision, because Chicago was a big potential education benefit for me. Therefore, a
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I`m sorry I forgot to add it;
http://www2.elc.polyu.edu.hk/CILL/eap/wordlists.htm

I used 10 of them in my reading and actually marked them but it didn`t work I guess.

You made some words bold, that means I don`t ne
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I had to use 10 vocabulary words from List 1 and 2. 5 from each.
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Hi;
The bold-face words are corrections.

Regards,
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