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Saintxiao Posted 17 years ago
Grammar

Problem with two paragraph grammer

hello teacher

i have some grammar problem don't know how to fix

plz help with it

Since 1997 MMORPG (Massively Multiplayer Online Role-Playing Game) was been design, until now almost twenty- three years, but many psychiatrist and psychologist figure out that most of MMORPG player has been addiction to the game, and they are inability to stop the activity and cause their life in trouble. Investigation show that MMORPG can affect any people who prolonged play game, and people who are addiction MMORPG may influence their quality life, family and society relationship, and also can cause them physical and psychological problem.

Investigate show that the majority addicts are age twelve to seventeen, also show that “female players below the age of 23 were more likely than male players of the same age range to consider themselves addicted to the game”(Nicholas). Different age can have different kinds effect, for example a teenage who was fourteen years old addiction to the game made cause himself school grade going down and relationship between friend. Chicago's WGN news says that “It’s a stimulant. It’s highly addictive. It’s causing kids to forget about their friends, ignore their school work and become impulsive and hot tempered” (Paul). Also according to online article there are many teenage commit suicides cause by online game. For example a South Korean who was collapsed and died after playing virtually non- stop MMOG for 86 hours in southwestern city of Kwangju (Gluck). Also a 13-year-old kid who is from china, his parent report “My son after playing 36 consecutive hours of online games, jumped from the 24th floor of a building and committed suicide while assuming a standard sky-flying pose”(Ying).
  

Top answer

Saintxiao You recognize that there are many errors in this passage. I have marked a few places where there are the following types of errors: 1) Incorrect singular form where a plural is necessary, and plural where a singular is necessary. 2) Incorrect verb tense formation Since these are the most common errors, you can fix these first, and then we can work on the next kinds of problems.

  • Saintxiao You recognize that there are many errors in this passage.
  • I have marked a few places where there are the following types of errors: 1) Incorrect singular form where a plural is necessary, and plural where a singular is necessary.
  • 2) Incorrect verb tense formation Since these are the most common errors, you can fix these first, and then we can work on the next kinds of problems.
  • It is best that you correct these problems, so you can learn where you make the most mistakes.
  • I have corrected a few other words and articles, and also shown where there are missing words.
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Saintxiao
You recognize that there are many errors in this passage.
I have marked a few places where there are the following types of errors:
1) Incorrect singular form where a plural is necessary, and plural where a singular is necessary.

2) Incorrect verb tense formation

Since these are the most common errors, you can fix these first, and then we can work on the ne
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thank you teacher i just fix those problem can you check again plz

Since 1997 MMORPG (Massively Multiplayer Online Role-Playing Game) were been created, until now almost twenty- three years, but many psychiatrists and psychologists figure out that most of MMORPG players are addict to the game, and they are inability to stop the activity and addiction cause their life in trouble. Investig
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saintxiaothank you teacher i just fix those problem can you check again plz

Since 1997 MMORPG (Massively Multiplayer Online Role-Playing Game) (1) were been created, until now almost twenty- three years, but many psychiatrists (OK) and
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thank you teacher plz check my paragraph again thank you Emotion: smile

Since 1997 MMORPG (Massively Multiplayer Online Role-Playing Game
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saintxiaoSince 1997 MMORPG (Massively Multiplayer Online Role-Playing Game) (1) be created, until now almost twenty- three years, but many psychiatrists and psychologists figure out that most of M
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thank you teacher plz check again

Since 1997, many MMORPGs have been careated by clever programmers. Until now almost twenty- three years, but manypsychiatrists and psychologists figure out that most of MMORPG players are addicted to the game. For example, inability to stop the activity and addiction causes trouble in their lives. Investigation shows that MMORPG can affect any people wh
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saintxiao:
You have made some good corrections, but I worry a lot about your other mistakes.

After 3 times, you are still making the same mistakes, so I know you do not understand why these are mistakes. Because of this, I have made corrections for you.

Please show your mistakes to your teacher so he or she can give you some extra help. Ask your teacher for lessons and e
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thank you teacher thanks for help Emotion: smile

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