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Antonia Posted 21 years ago
Grammar

problem with clauses within sentence

Hi,

I have problems with the order of clauses within a sentence. Can you please read it and see what can be done to make it more natural.

Standard forms can be designed for these purposes where/on which notes can be taken on what and how it lead to the efficient negotaiation or what jeopardized/undermined it.

Thank you in advance
  

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Hello Antonia I'm not certain about what you are meaning by the sentence you are proposing, but my try would be like: Standard forms are designed for the following purposes: on what notes should be taken, how they (=what) lead to an efficient negotiation and what will jeopardize/undermine it (=an efficient negotiation). paco

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  • Hello Antonia I'm not certain about what you are meaning by the sentence you are proposing, but my try would be like: Standard forms are designed for the following purposes: on what notes should be taken, how they (=what) lead to an efficient negotiation and what will jeopardize/undermine it (=an efficient negotiation).
  • paco
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Hello Antonia

I'm not certain about what you are meaning by the sentence you are proposing, but my try would be like:
Standard forms are designed for the following purposes: on what notes should be taken, how they (=what) lead to an efficient negotiation and what will jeopardize/undermine it (=an efficient negotiation).

paco
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Hi Paco,

Thank you for your post. The meaning of the sentence is:that certain forms are designed which contain lessons/notes on what were the things that lead to sufficient negotiation, how was it (successful negotiation) done and what undermined it.
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Hi Antonia

Which is the content of the forms, lessons from the past negotiations or notes for success in future negotiations? The sentence will depend on it.
paco
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Lessons from the past negotiations, which are in a way notes for success in future negotiations
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Sorry, instead of writing past simple form led I wrote lead, perhaps that's why it's confusing

The meaning of the sentence is:that certain forms are designed which contain lessons/notes on what were the things that led to sufficient negotiation, how was it (successful negotiation) done and what undermined it.
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So my try would be like below, but I am quite diffident.

Standard forms (are designed to) include some information about past negotiations such as what factors and what method led a negotiation to success and what things undermined it.
paco
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Thank you Paco. This sounds great. Just one question, is it OK to say ''Standard forms can be designed to include some information...''?
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If you are making this sentence to instruct students (or other people) how to design 'standard forms', you can say 'Standard forms can be designed to ...'.
paco
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Ok, thank you. Well, this is a sort of scientific paper on negotiation, I'm not sure if that counts as instruction?
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It depends on the context. If you are talking about formats of standard forms to improve negotiations, you could say like "(In some cases,) standard forms can/could be designed to ...". Anyway I cannot give a definite answer without knowing the context.
paco
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