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Anonymous Posted 14 years ago
Letter Writing
Prize winner, help please
Hello,
I have to write a short biography of a musician; during 2006-2011, he won 5 first prizes at international competitions.
I think I should write:
Percussionist and composer XX was born in Krakow (Poland) in 1990.
2006-2011 he won five 1st prizes at international percussion competitions.
In 2009 XX became a student of the xx where he is pursuing a double major in Applied Percussion and Composition.
His debut marimba album “Incoming” was released in 2011.
Do you think everything is OK?
Thank you for your help!
Artur
I have to write a short biography of a musician; during 2006-2011, he won 5 first prizes at international competitions.
I think I should write:
Percussionist and composer XX was born in Krakow (Poland) in 1990.
2006-2011 he won five 1st prizes at international percussion competitions.
In 2009 XX became a student of the xx where he is pursuing a double major in Applied Percussion and Composition.
His debut marimba album “Incoming” was released in 2011.
Do you think everything is OK?
Thank you for your help!
Artur
Top answer
As 4 sentences, they are OK. As an essay, it is a woeful disappointment.
- As 4 sentences, they are OK.
- As an essay, it is a woeful disappointment.
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As 4 sentences, they are OK. As an essay, it is a woeful disappointment.
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Yes, you are right 
Actually, it's not an essey it will be a short note on a DVD cover.
Thanks,
Artur
Actually, it's not an essey it will be a short note on a DVD cover.
Thanks,
Artur
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