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Mshokrof Posted 11 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Preparing for Toefl test

Hi ,
I have more than a month to prepare for TOEFL IBT test . I am targeting score 100. I am doing well with the reading and speaking parts but I am worried about the writing part. I wrote article to can you score it for me. Also I want advise how to plan my study . do I just need more practice ? what is my weak points and how to improve it.I prefer self study Do I need teacher ?

I enrolled on Coursera course called crafting an effective writer . it was very useful.But I didnt practice what I learned .

Question:
Compare the advantages of marrying at younger age to marrying at an older age

Marrying is an extremely important process , so it must be well planned . Choosing the right age for marrying is one of the key aspects to be considered. Both marrying at young age and old age has its own advantages and disadvantages. Since there is no the right answer that suites everyone , Person should search for his own formula that makes him happy.

Marrying at a young age is definitely more fun than marrying at an older age because of several reasons. First of all the person has chance to build himself and family with the other partner from the very beginning, hence they have chance to know each other better and learn from their mistakes . Second It is good for person to have someone besides him in the hard time . Couples always help each other to get through hard times. Finally when couple marry at a young age , they raise their children while they are still young ; therefore , they can give their children better care.

On the other hand marrying at an old age is more reliable than marrying at young age . Firstly, the more financially stable the couple are the less problems they face. Second couples are more mature and they can solve their problems better .Finaly and the most important reason when person postpones his marriage for some time he has more time and energy to invest in himself and his career.

It can argued which is the best due to the trade-off between having a more reliable relationship and having more fun. Furthermore there are many success and fail stories to support both point of views . In my opinion it is not about the time of marriage it is about the person you are marrying in-spite your age.

Thanks in advance,
Mostafa
  

Top answer

Hello, Mostafa. Basically, your essay is very well organized, your ideas are good, and your conclusion is strong. The only problems I see are minor grammar/vocabulary ones, many of which I suspect that you could fix if you reserve some time at the end of the writing section to proofread your work.

  • Hello, Mostafa.
  • Basically, your essay is very well organized, your ideas are good, and your conclusion is strong.
  • The only problems I see are minor grammar/vocabulary ones, many of which I suspect that you could fix if you reserve some time at the end of the writing section to proofread your work.
  • Do not leave a space before a comma, period, or other punctuation mark.
  • Marrying is an extremely important proces s, so it must be well planned .
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Hello, Mostafa.

Basically, your essay is very well organized, your ideas are good, and your conclusion is strong. The only problems I see are minor grammar/vocabulary ones, many of which I suspect that you could fix if you reserve some time at the end of the writing section to proofread your work. Do not leave a space before a comma, period, or other punctuation mark.

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