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Eddie had nothing on except his towel when the nurse saw him. The nurse was in fury. She demanded him to put the clothes on. Then Eddie told her that he had no clothes. The nurse called up the small boy. The small boy said that he was not responsible for the laundry this week. Then the nurse called the big boy. The big boy went to the laundry room to get Eddie a uniform. The nurse was really upset on Eddie when the small boy told her that Eddie did things againt the ward policy. Her face was becoming more furious. Then she glared at the Chief holding a mop. The chief whispered to Eddie that you had better watch out because the nurse was mad. It was really stink in the ward. One can smell all kind of disgusting odour. By the time the small boy told the nurse how bad Eddie behaved, he almost forgot to tell her there was another patient died the other night.

MrPedantic · Accepted Answer

Hello Welkins

Did you have a particular question, or would you like the grammar checked?

MrP

Welkins2139 · Answer

Hi Mrpedantic,

I prefer someone proofreads my posts.

Thanks

LanguageLover · Answer

Then, it's better to post them to the writing section.

Welkins2139 · Answer

Writing section ? Where is it ?

Thanks

LanguageLover · Answer

MrPedantic · Answer

Hello W2139

I'll mark the parts in bold that need to be changed – if you try again, I'll check them for you.

° means "sounds like a direct translation – odd"

¹ means "something missing"

² means "unidiomatic"

³ means "ungrammatical"

Eddie had nothing on except his towel when the nurse saw him. The nurse was in fury¹. She demanded him to³ put the² clothes on. Then Eddie told her that he had no clothes. The nurse called up the small boy° The small boy said that he was not responsible for the laundry this week². Then the nurse called the big boy°. The big boy went to the laundry room to get Eddie a uniform. The nurse was really upset on Eddie² when the small boy told her that Eddie did things againt the ward policy. Her face was becoming more furious. Then she glared at the Chief° holding a mop. The chief whispered to Eddie that you had better watch out³ because the nurse was mad. It was really stink³ in the ward. One can smell all kind of disgusting odour³. By the time the small boy told the nurse how bad Eddie behaved³, he almost forgot² to tell her there was another patient died¹ the other night.

MrP

Welkins2139 · Answer

The nurse was in her fury. She demanded that he put his clothes on. The small boy said that he was not responsible for the laundry for this week. The nurse was really upset Eddie. The chief whispered to Eddie that you had better sealled your lips because the nurse was mad. It was really stinking in the ward. One can smell something disgusting/disgusting odour. By the time the small boy told the nurse how badly Eddie behaved/did, he had almost forgotten to tell her there was another patient passed on/dead the other night.

Thanks MrP

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