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The hoist of the elevator was againt the side of the building. She walked across the planks strapped with ropes. Her high heels stood firmly against the planks. The tallest buildings stood near the Yantze river. The bulldozers cleared the area for the park. The iron fences surrounded the building. The fences were decorated with signs from those companies which provided materials and supplies. One sign which stoke her eyes was the architecture company. Though Mr Peterson was not a lawyer, he had drafted the four-page contract.

The CIS nominee was grilled by the committee. The FBI and the CIA do not share intelligence with each other. If they had had, the 9/11 attack might have been prevented. Due to the wake-up call, they commit to share more secrets in the future, said one official privy to the Al Quada's attack on the US embassy in Kenya.

Hundred of thousands of eligible green card holders rush to nationalize. The green card holder arrived at 8:00 am. The line already stretched over 5 blocks long. What motivated them ? They wanted to get benefit or have a right to vote. For some reason, some dont want to become citizens until recently by the furor debate on immigrant reform. They dont want to pay the fee for the test; they dont understand English; they may head home.

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

I've high-lighted places where I've either made a correction or just indicated a word you need to change. If you want to make changes and post again, I'd be happy to check this again.

I hope this approach seems OK to you.

Best wishes, Clive

The hoist of the elevator was againt the side of the building. She walked across the planks strapped with ropes. Her high heels stood firmly against the planks. The tallest buildings stood near the Yantze river. The bulldozers had cleared the area for the park. The iron fences surrounded the building. The fences were decorated with signs from those companies which provided materials and supplies. One sign which stoke her eyes was for an architecture company. Though Mr Peterson was not a lawyer, he had drafted the four-page contract.

The CIS nominee was grilled by the committee. The FBI and the CIA do not share intelligence with each other. If they had, the 9/11 attack might have been prevented. Due to the wake-up call, they committed to sharing more secrets in the future, said one official privy to Al Quaeda's attack on the US embassy in Kenya.

Hundred of thousands of eligible green card holders rushed to nationalize. The green card holders arrived at 8:00 am. The line already stretched over 5 blocks long. What motivated them ? They wanted to get benefits or have a right to vote. For some reason, some don't want to become citizens until recently because of the furor and debate on immigrant reform. They don't want to pay the fee for the test; they don't understand English; they may head home.

Welkins2139 · Answer

Thank you very much, Clive ! That's excellent.

May I have a suggestion ?

Would you put different colors for the words that I need to change and corrections you make?

Once again, thank you !

Clive · Answer

Hi,

blue = you correct it

red = I corrected it

Clive

The hoist of the elevator was againt the side of the building. She walked across the planks strapped with ropes. Her high heels stood firmly against the planks. The tallest buildings stood near the Yantze river. The bulldozers had cleared the area for the park. The iron fences surrounded the building. The fences were decorated with signs from those companies which provided materials and supplies. One sign which stoke her eyes was for an architecture company. Though Mr Peterson was not a lawyer, he had drafted the four-page contract.

The CIS nominee was grilled by the committee. The FBI and the CIA do not share intelligence with each other. If they had, the 9/11 attack might have been prevented. Due to the wake-up call, they committed to sharing more secrets in the future, said one official privy to Al Quaeda's attack on the US embassy in Kenya.

Hundred of thousands of eligible green card holders rushed to nationalize. The green card holders arrived at 8:00 am. The line already stretched over 5 blocks long. What motivated them ? They wanted to get benefits or have a right to vote. For some reason, some don't want to become citizens until recently because of the furor and debate on immigrant reform. They don't want to pay the fee for the test; they don't understand English; they may head home.

Welkins2139 · Answer

Clive, thank, thank you very much !

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