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Thanh Nga Posted 9 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Positive effect of computers

Hello everyone, i wrote a essay about above topic but i have no idea whether it is good or not. Please help me.
Here is my essay:

It is obvious that computer has become more and more indispensable tool in the day - to -day activities. Some people claim that computers bring us a lot of benefits while others state that this dependence on computers has negative effect on society. My essay will shed light on the positive impact of computers.

On the one hand, computers make live easier for all people everyday. People can do task quickly anh communicate to their friends and their family with click on button. In the past, when you miss your mom, you only call her via mobie phone or coming back home to see her. But now, you can see and hear her voice via Viber or other forms of social network. It has no cost to use. On the other hand, computers play a significant role on education system as well. Students can search and pick any information that we need, then makes them more indenpendent and effective learners. There are thousand of free online course available on Youtube that anyone can watch and learn from anywhere in the world. By providing a number of events in the world each day, computers enrich our live and broaden our hoziron. Finally, computer has shortened the distance between cultures. People can travel from one to another very quicky and see how people other zones dress, speak and behavior.

To sum u, computers bring a lot of helpful benefits on the society. It is undeniable that computers are become popular in the world.

  

Top answer

Here are a few quick comments. Don't just have one big body paragraph . Break it into 'one point per paragraph' form.

  • Here are a few quick comments.
  • Don't just have one big body paragraph .
  • Break it into 'one point per paragraph' form.
  • Ideally, all the paragraphs in your essay should be very roughly the same length.
  • This includes your introduction and conclusion.
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Here are a few quick comments.


Don't just have one big body paragraph. Break it into 'one point per paragraph' form. Ideally, all the paragraphs in your essay should be very roughly the same length. This includes your introduction and conclusion.

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It is obvious that computer has become more and more indispensable tool in the day - to -day activities. Some people

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