Poor english let me down

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Dear all,

I had submitted my case study and career evaluation to the examiner for my architect professional qualification. Sadly, they marked down all of my works because of of my poor chinese english. I must admit that nobody had proofread them before submission due to the very tight time scale.
I must re-submit it again. The worest things is that I still cannot spot most of the problems even when I re-check it again!
Can someone help? The case study is about 10K words and the evaluation is about 3K words.
Thank you

Miriam · Accepted Answer

Hello, Terry

I'm sorry to hear what's happened to you.
The case study sounds a bit too long to post here just in one post, but perhaps you could post break it into shorter parts and post them one at a time.
I personally don't know a thing about architecture, but perhaps someone around here does. In any case, we could at least try to help you with your English.
If you still have enough time, that is.

Miriam

Terryng · Answer

I think someone can have a look and tell me on the typical errors I did:

Preface

The Bramah House had caught fire on August 2001, caused by a fault fan located at the third floor roof. The fourth floor (attic) and the roof had completely burnt down. The building was partially destructed. The structure was considered unsafe above third floor. The gable and flank walls were left free standing. The whole building was water damaged due to fire saving.

L-A had advised KI to take the fast track programme using two stages tender procedure. Stripping works was commencing in parallel with architects’ design period. At the same time, contractors were invited to enter into first stage tender for the main contract. So it would lead into second stage tender once the final detail design package ready.

The Bramah House fire reinstatement works started immediately after the accident. Living-architects was appointed by Bramah House Ltd on the beginning because their Executive Director Kevin Ireland is our repeated client. I became involved from the inception to the completion. Project is now under defects liability period until April 2005.

The main text and the incidents studies will focus on project management before construction stage. The first section is giving the overall view of project. It will set the scene for the following section to analysis two incidents of the project:
• Mechanical & Electrical consultant HMS Building Services Ltd Procurement
• Adjoining owners Issues

Introduction

I have been working in L-A since July 2000. I am given opportunity to involve in projects including office refurbishment, maisonette conversion, school extension and public housing.

Marian Biernet is the project architect running the job. I was engaged as assistant from the time we were appointed. I was given chance to take pat in design process from schematic design, fire escape strategy, architecture details to room finishes and specification. I was responsible for preparing drawings and schedules of works, planning design programme, assisting consultant information collaboration, following up site meeting minute and site inspection and coordination works.

MB and I coordinated well as a team. Client are very pleased about work and our professional services that we are appointed again on his Hudson House refurbishment works

Project Summary

Client: Kelvin Ireland (KI) is manager director of The Bramah House Limited under the parent charities corporation called The London Housing Foundation.
The Bramah House is one of their properties.
Their property was under lease to different housing related charity organizations for an affordable rent.

Site: The Bramah House, 65-71 Bermondsey Street SE1, London
The Bramah house is a restored and refurbished four storeys Victorian warehouse.

Contract: two stage contract
Stripping out contract: JCT minor work
Main contract: JCT 98 with bill

Contract value: stripping out contract £62,000 main contract £1.65 million

Stripping out: Christmas Ward Demolition

Main Contractor: Kingswood Contraction Limited

Planning Supervisor: Martin Gray of Living Projects Ltd

Quantity Surveyor: E P Stevens

Structural engineer: Train & Kemp Engineers

Electric & Mechanical
Engineers: HMS Building Services ltd and Mihaka ltd

SECTION A- Project Background

The project critical dates:

Aug 01 The Bramah House had caught fire. The building was partially destructed
12 Feb 02 stripping out works commence on site
14 Mar 02 stripping out contract completion date
15 Mar 02 interview date for contractors of main contract
17 Mar 02 first stage tender received, Kingswood win the bid
15 Apr 02 practical completion of stripping out works
11 Jun 02 planning applications for roof top plant and lift housing were submitted
26 Jun 02 M&E consultant HMS were dismissed
7 Jul 02 second stage tender received from Kingswood
22 Jul 02 site procession date for the main contract
14 Sep 02 planning permissions were granted
15 Apr 03 main contract completion date
22 Apr 03 practical completion date of main contract

Project meeting minutes:The project background is discussed under topics as following:

1 Financing

Quantity surveyor E P Stevens was appointed on the early stage to negotiate with Loss adjustor to identify parameters of costs of reinstatement works. E P Stevens had been told that the building was under insured, thus insurance will only cover only to reinstate the fabric of shell (~£1.5 million). Replace works of Individual let space is not under cover. The total consultant fee expanded would be 11% and disbursements. Client was advised to draw realistic and cost-effective reinstatement strategies which KI & the London House Foundation would agree.

E P Stevens had outlined the main contract value of around £1.4m, plus remedial works, stripping out . Loss adjuster had broadly agreed but noted the insured amount only £1.515m. Additionally, Bramah House had very minimal fund available. KI was under pressure to keep the cost under control:
• Total consultant fee was capped at 11%. It was the area KI looked at on reducing expense. He was under wrong impression that, under M&E works design and build contract, design fee could be saved. That was the reason HMS were appointed.
• Given the chance, KI was agreed to trade the right of light to the adjoining owner Davis Wine Merchants to fund the project.

2 Architect Appointment

KI had had quite a few happy working relationships with us living-architects for decades. Our retired senior Stanley Barnett is his most trusted consultant. It was the reason then Kelvin Ireland contacted us immediately after the fire and building had been propped up by Southwark Council.

L-A provided some un-paid preliminary before the commission secured. Later, client accepted our fee proposal for the feasibility study on a time basis.

On Oct 2002, L-A were officially commissioned to take the role of design team leader. Percentage rate Profession fee at 5.5% was agreed

The above is only the part of it.

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