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Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
Science & IT
Poetry
Please may you read my poem:
Sitting, thinking, waiting,
Waiting for your eyes to stumble across the page.
The page filled with letters and words,
All still until there’s a noise and they’re disturbed.
Sitting, waiting, thinking,
Thinking “How long will it take to finish this page?”
This page with piled up punctuation,
Strutting around as if they’ve won the domination.
Waiting and sitting,
Sitting on your own,
All alone,
Not even thinking about the page on which the black mess has grown.
its about when i read
Im open to constructive critisism and if it is rubish please just say
Thank you : )
Sitting, thinking, waiting,
Waiting for your eyes to stumble across the page.
The page filled with letters and words,
All still until there’s a noise and they’re disturbed.
Sitting, waiting, thinking,
Thinking “How long will it take to finish this page?”
This page with piled up punctuation,
Strutting around as if they’ve won the domination.
Waiting and sitting,
Sitting on your own,
All alone,
Not even thinking about the page on which the black mess has grown.
its about when i read
Im open to constructive critisism and if it is rubish please just say
Thank you : )
Top answer
I am always loath to call one's early literary efforts "rubbish" because even a genius is bound to have a few false starts or be "raw" in the beginning. I am not sure if this site is the best place for it, anyway. g.
- I am always loath to call one's early literary efforts "rubbish" because even a genius is bound to have a few false starts or be "raw" in the beginning.
- I am not sure if this site is the best place for it, anyway.
- g.
- it is " could you read my poem", not "may"; it's "rubbish" and not "rubish", "it's" and not "its", "I'm" and not "Im".
- I am not being condescending or trying to nitpick, just pointing this out.
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I am always loath to call one's early literary efforts "rubbish" because even a genius is bound to have a few false starts or be "raw" in the beginning. I am not sure if this site is the best place for it, anyway.
The one suggestion that I would give you is to master the English language before trying your hand at literature (e.g. it is "could you read my poem", not "may"; it's "ru
The one suggestion that I would give you is to master the English language before trying your hand at literature (e.g. it is "could you read my poem", not "may"; it's "ru
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