plzz...help me! can anybody check ma motivation letter..???
0 00Letter of Motivation00Kamran Huseynzade 00Dear Sir or Madam,00 00I appreciate this opportunity to provide further background information in support of my application for entrance to the International Business program at the 00 for the 2008 autumn term.00 00First of all, I would like to give a little information about myself. I was born in 00 - the capital city of 010200 on the 2601sup00th02sup00 of September 1989. The nationality of me is Azerbaijani. My parents are interested in study (they are both teachers), therefore they give great importance to my education.00 00After my 601sup00th02sup00 grade at the state secondary school, I passed the entrance exam of one of the most well-known high schools in my country. Since then, I continued my education studying at 00 “Dede Gorgud” 00. My future profession was very significant for me, so I began to think about my career when I was in earlier grades. For a good career, I know that English is important. Attending to such high school presented me an opportunity to improve my English. At the high school technical subjects, like mathematics, physics, chemistry, and biology, plus, computer science were taught in English. While I was studying at high school I determined some points to reach, so at the 801sup00th02sup00 grade, I started to prepare getting a place in the national mathematics olympiad team. Eventually, at the 901sup00th02sup00 grade I was accepted to the team. In May 2005, I was in Almaty (010200) to participate in the International Mathematic Project Competition – 2005. It was successful for me, as my project took first place and I got a golden medal.00 00I was not successful only at studies, but also sport is my life’s great part. I’m very interested in football and good at playing table tennis. In 2006, there was a football championship among private high schools and we were awarded gold medals.00 00It’s obvious that the more languages you know, the more successful you are. Besides, fluently speaking in my mother tongue, I know English, Russian, Turkish, and German. Being raised in a bilingual city and in a multicultural environment presented me great chances to enlarge my cultural knowledge and of course, my language ability, too. Russian is considered as a second language in my country, so learning Russian was not hard for me. Almost, most of people know Russian in my country. Turkish is also widespread in our environment and it’s much near to my mother tongue. But German was not easy to learn, as I attended to language course of German Embassy in 00. During courses I established my basic German knowledge. Now at the university I get German classes as my second foreign language.00 00 00After 901sup00th02sup00, it was time to think about the university I want to study. I was searching something appropriate for me, for my character. During school years, I was communicable and my organizing skill helped me to go forward in most areas. Due to being an organizer of social activities at school, I realized that the best field for my future career is something related to administration.00 00When I graduated from school, I got 668.75 points out of 700 points in the university entrance exam and gained a place in the International Economic Relations faculty of 00. The exam included Mathematics, Geography, Mother tongue, English, and History of Azerbaijan. Because of getting 00 in the exam I get presidential scholarship. This success convinced me getting higher points and serving for my country.00 00But I never wanted to stop on what I achieved, so I was making a plan to endure my education in a respected European university such as 00.00 00I was wondering what sector to choose for studying abroad. I have already known that it must be something related to my present faculty (International Economic Relations). Also it must be the sector that I can express myself best and use my all skills. Interest in international economic life and economic news also affected my decision. In addition, my father gives lectures at 00, so getting some advice from him and listening his lectures, finally, I decided to study International Business at your university, because I found it more suitable for me and for my demands.00 00 00 00 00 00In conclusion, I would like to state that I like to undertake obligations and work with team spirit. I desire to get new experiences and in my thought, this program is the best way to gain all of it and to discover new ideas. Its international concept enlarges opportunities to interact with different students from various countries on definite subjects, and it is the exact thing I’ve been looking for. I am positive that the 00 would be an excellent start for a voluntary business career.00I thank you for considering my application and I look forward to your response.00Sincerely yours,00Kamran Huseynzade00 0-
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0Kamran, your letter is a very complex one and you have a rich language. Congratulations! I find that the thing that casts a small shadow over it is somehow the lack of order and the lenght of the phrases.
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0Kamran, your letter is a very complex one and you have a rich language.
Congratulations!
I find that the thing that casts a small shadow over it is somehow the lack of order and the lenght of the phrases.
02br 02br 00First of all, I would like to give some information about myself.
I was born in Baku, the capital city of Azerbaijan, on the 2601sup 00th02sup 00 of September 1989.
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0Kamran, your letter is a very complex one and you have a rich language. Congratulations! I find that the thing that casts a small shadow over it is somehow the lack of order and the lenght of the phrases. I'm sure my correcting won't make it perfect, but here's a suggestion:02br 02br 00Dear Sir or Madam,02br 02br 00I appreciate the opportunity that I have