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Pinky88 Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

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Vehicle



There are several arguments for having more than one vehicle. Firstly, if you have this more than one you have also more freedom you have open options because you don’t depend on public transport and its timetable. If your car has disrupted. Also facilitate ways of life...

Secondly, you have Multiple choices

you can travel and go wherever you want and the cost of this trip will not be so expensive as traveling by plane ,

Thirdly, at the time necessary may need more than a single vehicle. Perhaps you have many people and is not enough one car for carry them.



Finally, if you have an emergency and perhaps is the vehicle has been disrupted there is alternative to, you can drive your car and go to solve your problem.

Nowadays, our society has habits which make it difficult for our planet to have a long healthy life , is pollution because of the smoke and noise from overcrowding because of the many transportation winches is increasing more and more every year , and also multiple transportation caused numerous accidents than loss many lives .

And the are certain disadvantages of it... Firstly you have maintained and repair your car regularly.

Therefore, you need to spend a considerable amount of many to keep your cars in good condition.



To sum up... allowing individuals to own more than one vehicle is having his risk and benefits and having a vehicle is very important in our society. Although all the families need to have more than one vehicle.

  

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Your essay needs an introduction and a thesis statement, more detail for each point, and a stronger conclusion. Here are some repairs: Vehicles There are several arguments for having more than one vehicle. First , if you have more than one, you have more freedom and more open options , because you do not need to depend on public transport and timetables .

  • Your essay needs an introduction and a thesis statement, more detail for each point, and a stronger conclusion.
  • Here are some repairs: Vehicles There are several arguments for having more than one vehicle.
  • First , if you have more than one, you have more freedom and more open options , because you do not need to depend on public transport and timetables .
  • Second , you have multiple choices : you can travel wherever you like and the cost of this trip will not be so expensive as traveling by plane .
  • Third, you may need more than a single vehicle at one time; perhaps you have many people and one car is not enough to carry them.
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Your essay needs an introduction and a thesis statement, more detail for each point, and a stronger conclusion. Here are some repairs:

Vehicles

There are several arguments for having more than one vehicle.


First, if you have more than one, you have more freedom and more open options, because you do not need

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