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Mai Chang Posted 5 years ago
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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.


My essay:

A majority of pressing global issue are now be engendered by populating exposure. This phenomenon is most be concerned as not only the main reason for increasing renting price in big cities, but also having bad affect to environment.


Overpopulation can lead to a vexing problem that appear in numerous cities, it is the chronic shortage of housing. The main caused is involve in the massive influx of rural migrants. People from poor villages are flocking to the cities in search of better job or education opportunities. For example, in order to seek a job which has rewarding positions with competitive compensation and benefit packages, the young in Vietnam are migrating to center of economic and political like Hanoi or Ho Chi Minh city. That make the government has to make enormous effort to combat the over crowding issue but fall to gain a satisfactory result when the number of people raising over year.


Besides, overpopulation is be consider to the main factor of population and climate change. It triggered mainly by burgeoning global population. The many resident in habitat place, their daily activities tend to do great harm to surrounding, even accidentally or deliberating. For example, households dump their waste directly into lake and river, or consume too many plastic bags. And because of population booming, human need more land to live and farming, so many forests are being destruction.


By and large, overpopulation triggers the many above-mentioned issues. The goverment need some population control method like set a regulation allow the number of babies in each family, and the individuals must be raised their own awareness of protect environment.

  

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A majority of pressing global issue are now be engendered by populating exposure . (That is incomprehensible. It means nothing.

  • A majority of pressing global issue are now be engendered by populating exposure .
  • (That is incomprehensible.
  • It means nothing.
  • ) This phenomenon (Wrong word.
  • ) is most be concerned (That is not a grammatical verb phrase) as not only the main reason for increasing renting price (unnatural phrase) in big cities, but also having bad affect Affect is a verb.
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A majority of pressing global issue are now be engendered by populating exposure. (That is incomprehensible. It means nothing. You tried to copy something from the internet but you make a mistake in copying.) This phenomenon (Wrong word. Most IELTS writers use this word wrongly.)

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