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Micky1312 Posted 14 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Plz help to correct my work below
Friends, I am posting my work down there and hoping to get your correction soon. This writing is in urgent matter about looking for a solution to save Aunt from cancer.
Thanks very much in advance and I am looking forward to get your correction.
Best,
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Dear ... ...
Currently, my family has been very depressed because my dear Aunt has been in severe sick. My Aunt was diagnosed with a blood cancer 16 years ago. We, the family, has strongly been supporting her and encouraged her to fight against the disease. We had sent her to get treated from the hospital in Bangkok. She was prescribed to take several medicines for about ten years. The condition was not better and because of the improvement of the cancer status which has threaten her life, we have sent her to be hospitalized in a hospital in Singapore.
The Singaporean cancer doctors explained this is a Chronic Blood Cancer which the group of cancer doctors have been researching the method/medicine to cure such disease. No medicine which currently can cure such disease yet. She has been registered as a member for the experiment of blood cancer. She has received a free treatment from doctors. She took all prescribe medicines very regularly as advised by the doctor. However, her condition seems not getting better, she is getting really weak from time to time. The doctor scrutinized her cancer condition and saw the extreme development of the cancer. The doctors said the new medicines may not affect this disease anymore.
Hearing this, we all have been so depressed and my Aunt has been very discouraged to tackle it. Everyday, this disease keeps troubling her very much, even though after taking medicine.
We have been trying every possible chance as we can for 16 years. She is the mother of five children (04 daughters), a grandmother of little nine grandchildren. We now have been very worried.
Therefore, we would like to seek for Your blessings to advise us a solution for this matter.
I am looking forward to hearing your valuable/highly advice at your earliest convenience.
Highest Respect,
(Name)
Thanks very much in advance and I am looking forward to get your correction.
Best,
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Dear ... ...
Currently, my family has been very depressed because my dear Aunt has been in severe sick. My Aunt was diagnosed with a blood cancer 16 years ago. We, the family, has strongly been supporting her and encouraged her to fight against the disease. We had sent her to get treated from the hospital in Bangkok. She was prescribed to take several medicines for about ten years. The condition was not better and because of the improvement of the cancer status which has threaten her life, we have sent her to be hospitalized in a hospital in Singapore.
The Singaporean cancer doctors explained this is a Chronic Blood Cancer which the group of cancer doctors have been researching the method/medicine to cure such disease. No medicine which currently can cure such disease yet. She has been registered as a member for the experiment of blood cancer. She has received a free treatment from doctors. She took all prescribe medicines very regularly as advised by the doctor. However, her condition seems not getting better, she is getting really weak from time to time. The doctor scrutinized her cancer condition and saw the extreme development of the cancer. The doctors said the new medicines may not affect this disease anymore.
Hearing this, we all have been so depressed and my Aunt has been very discouraged to tackle it. Everyday, this disease keeps troubling her very much, even though after taking medicine.
We have been trying every possible chance as we can for 16 years. She is the mother of five children (04 daughters), a grandmother of little nine grandchildren. We now have been very worried.
Therefore, we would like to seek for Your blessings to advise us a solution for this matter.
I am looking forward to hearing your valuable/highly advice at your earliest convenience.
Highest Respect,
(Name)
Top answer
This is my interpretation of your letter. I am a native US English speaker, so I hope this helps. I hope your aunt gets better!
- This is my interpretation of your letter.
- I am a native US English speaker, so I hope this helps.
- I hope your aunt gets better!
- I have assumed at the end paragraph that you are talking to someone in the medical field?
- If you are talking to someone religious, the blessings phrase could stay.
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This is my interpretation of your letter. I am a native US English speaker, so I hope this helps. I hope your aunt gets better! I have assumed at the end paragraph that you are talking to someone in the medical field? If you are talking to someone religious, the blessings phrase could stay. In parenthesis are little details it would be good to fill in. I've also included the form for a busin
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Hi Captainladyace,
I really thank you very much for your time reading my letter through and your edition to it. It's been indeed help for me.
I apologize for delaying my thanking note to you due to work' tight schedules and to company my aunt in the hospital.
Again thank you very much.
Micky
I really thank you very much for your time reading my letter through and your edition to it. It's been indeed help for me.
I apologize for delaying my thanking note to you due to work' tight schedules and to company my aunt in the hospital.
Again thank you very much.
Micky
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