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In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want.

To what extent should children have to follow rules?

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Advantage and disadvantage of Strict rules of behaviour

Advantage and disadvantage of freedom from rules

Conclusion how much children should do

Introduction:-

Fostering our child is challenge because parents desire of well-being for their child. That is the reason, in number of countries, children are required to follow the discipline. On other side, the western world does not believe keeping the child in discipline. The subsequent paragraph discuss the advantages and disadvantages for keeping the child in discipline and partially support the discipline factor for the child uprising.

To begin with advantages of keep adhered to rules, the first and foremost terms appears ”Result”. In child upbringing, either he is in studies or sports or any extra curricular activity, the child is expected to achieve its goal. In addition, this is fact, to achieve goal the continuous efforts are required. For example if a child wants to excel in studies so he must be adhered to the schedule which will push him to put continuous efforts. Similarly over exaggeration of studies can lead to depression which reflects the disadvantage of sticking to rules and regulation.

On the contrary, the concept of western world is to let the child establish his choice and this may only be happen when the child is left without any rules or discipline. However, believing on this, is less practical as leaving the child on his own leads to the state of confusion. Therefore it is required to give the child a thoughtful guidance which can not be left without discipline. This how, still the child requires more and less strictness to be followed.

In a nutshell, Child is the future of our current generation and therefore their upbringing must be little controlled and partially disciplined

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