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Dear members:I wrote the following sentences but not sure if it is correct and idiomatical or not. Can you please correct them for me? thank you.1. I wish to become an expert in the fields of my interests whocontributes to the betterment of human life.2.With an aim of making contribution to the development of science andtechnology in my country, I nurtured a burning desire to go abroad for my higher study.SincerelyLiuJU

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[nq:1]Dear members: I wrote the following sentences but not sure if it is correct and idiomatical or not. Can you ... I wish to become an expert in the fields of my interests who contributes to the betterment of human life.[/nq]
Alightly better: "I wish to become an expert in my fields of interest and contribute to the betterment of human life."
This still sounds a bit strange as usually a person becomes an expert in just one field.
[nq:1]2.With an aim of making contribution to the development of science and technology in my country, I nurtured a burning desire to go abroad for my higher study.[/nq]
Because I want to make a contribution to teh development of science and technology in my country I have nurtured a burtning desire to go abroad for my university education (or perhaps you mean: for my post-graduate studies).
You don't make clear which level you want to study at. Do you want to go to university abroad for your basic university education? Or do you want to go abroad after finishing your basic studies in your own country in order to get a higher degree, e.g. a doctorate?
Regards, Einde O'Callaghan

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Thank Einde very much.
I mean I wish to go abroad for my graduate studies.

Sincerely,
LiuJu

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[nq:1]Thank Einde very much. I mean I wish to go abroad for my graduate studies.[/nq]
Then it's best to say precisely that.
Regards, Einde O'Callaghan

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Thank you very much. Because these sentences will be in an application essay, I want to make my sentences sound more vivid and write the sentences more complicated. However, I am afraid that they will be not idiomatic. (SInce I am not a native speaker so in the my thought they might sound good but maybe in fact in English they are unacceptable).

What about the following sentences: Should I use the pharse "a wide gamut of ..." and "to name a few" in the sentence? (I copy them from an essay of a Idian student).
"The undergraduate curriculum at my univiersity introduced me to a wide gamut of interesting subjects such as semiconductor devices, optical communications, and signal processing to name a few. "

And what about the following sentence? What I should do to make them sound better:
"The very interesting curriculum with a strong focus on Photonics did provide me with intensive knowledge and valuable experimental skills in fiber optics, semiconductor lasers, micro-machining and MEMS processing. In addition, through the work as a graduate research assistant in the Photonics Laboratory of University of ***, I was involved in real research projects and accumulated a strong background in fiber gratings and their applications. "
Thank you very much.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Sincerely

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[nq:1]Thank you very much. Because these sentences will be in an application essay, I want to make my sentences sound ... a wide gamut of interesting subjects such as semiconductor devices, optical communications, and signal processing to name a few. "[/nq]
"a wide range of interesting subjects" - the phrase with "gamut" would be "a whole gamut", but this is stylistically inappropriate - OTOH "to name a few" seems OK to me.
[nq:1]And what about the following sentence? What I should do to make them sound better: "The very interesting curriculum with ... ***, I was involved in real research projects and accumulated a strong background in fiber gratings and their applications. "[/nq]
I'd leave out the value judgement of the nature of the curriculum and wouldn't use the emphatic "do", and I wouldn't capitalise "photonics". "The curriculum with a strong focus on photonics provided me ..."

Regards, Einde O'Callaghan

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[nq:2]Thank you very much. Because these sentences will be in ... optical communications, and signal processing to name a few. "[/nq]
[nq:1]"a wide range of interesting subjects" - the phrase with "gamut" would be "a whole gamut", but this is stylistically inappropriate - OTOH "to name a few" seems OK to me.[/nq]
Yes, it's 'whole gamut.' As in Dottie Parker's
famous barb: The actress's performance ran the
whole gamut of emotions - all the way from A to B.

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