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016.3. In a municipal transportation you casually became the witness of conversation of parents about problems in disciple of children. Write down ideas02br02br00In this occasion02br02br00According to me parent are too busy nowadays. As they spend there most of the time to the office work. So they are not able to give time to spend with children. And they also scold there children taken out all there tiredness on their children02br02br00Parent must act practical and enthusiric in front of their children.02br02br00Parent should stand as an example to their children; parent being elder to them must act sensitive.02br02br00Parent should respect their elder so their children respect them.02br02br00Parent mustn’t use alcohols, cigarettes, etc. children when grow May also act the same way. For example nowadays you can see 6 form children smoking cigarettes. They think it cool to smoke02br02br00Parent must not make the children ill mannered which may make you angry.02br02br00Teenager must be handled with care; they may be out of control if not handled.0-

Nona the brit · Accepted Answer

0 Think about your plurals. Parents. Teenagers. Elders. 0-

Ghai_prince13 · Answer

016.3. In a municipal transportation you casually became the witness of conversation of parents about problems in disciple of children. Write down ideas02br
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00In this occasion02br
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00According to me parents are too busy nowadays. As they spend there most of the time to the office work. So they are not able to give time to spend with children. And they also scold there children taken out all there tiredness on their children02br
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00Parents must act practical and enthusiric in front of their children.02br
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00Parents should stand as an example to their children; parents being elders to them must act sensitive.02br
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00Parents should respect their elders so their children respect them.02br
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00Parents mustn’t use alcohols, cigarettes, etc. children when grow May also act the same way. For example nowadays you can see 6 form children smoking cigarettes. They think it cool to smoke02br
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00Parents must not make the children ill mannered which may make you angry.02br
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00Teenagers must be handled with care; they may be out of control if not handled.0-

Nona the brit · Answer

0Corrections in green, comments in pink.02br
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01del~~00 According to me02del~~00 I believe that parents are too busy nowadays 00as00 they spend 01del~~00there02del~~00 most of 00their00 time 00at 01del~~00to the02del~~00 office00 work. So they are not able to 01del~~00give 02del~~00spend00 enough00 time 01del~~00to02del~~00 with 00their00 children. 01del~~00And02del~~00 T00hey00 also scold 00their00 children 00out of tiredness00/00tak01del~~00en02del~~00 00out all their 00tiredness00 on their children.02br
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00You can say 'according to someone else's name' but not 'according to me', you can't quote yourself as an authority on something. IT's not seen as polite. Watch your use of there for their. The final sentence - pick which expression you want to use as you can't have both of them in one sentence.02br
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00Parents must act practical and enthusiric in front of their children.00Bit of an odd sentence. Parents should have a practical and enthusiastic attitude towards their children?02br
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00Parents should stand as an example to their children; parents, 00being their elders,00 must act sensitive. 00sensitive is an odd word here02br
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00Parents should respect their elders so their children 00learn to 00respect them 00as well00.02br
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00Parents mustn’t use 00alcohol01del~~00s02del~~00, cigarettes, etc. 00as their00 children00,00 when 00grow,00 00 may00 also act the same way. For example nowadays you can see 006 form00 children smoking cigarettes. They think it cool to smoke.02br
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00Parents 00must not make the children ill mannered which may make you angry00. 00Try again, think 'let' or 'allow' rather than make and the end of the sentence needs work.02br
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00Teenagers must be handled with care; they 00can get00 out of control if not 00handled. handled how? You need an adjective here00.0-

Ghai_prince13 · Answer

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