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Nowadays, the more a country develops its technological progress, the less we see the existence of traditional skills and ways. I think that we should not lose them completely as many of them are still helpful and others need to be abolished because they are not efficient. There are many cases that advanced technology can not interfere in our daily life, for example, the love we reserve for our beloved ones. It would be more meaningful if we can visit our parents and present them with gifts instead of talking and sending presents to them online. It is also true in case of taking care of our children. Instead of giving them a mobile phone to plays game themselves when we have free time, it would be much more efficient and caring if parents can take them to public places and play as well as socialize with them. However, some traditional ways of life should give ways to new technologies as they have proven more effectively. For example, it is much faster if we use machines for washing dishes, clothes and vehicles than using our hands in the old days. It will be more convenient if we can communicate with one another by using cell phones instead of going to people’s houses just to inform something, like the way we did in the past There are countless examples that can be cited here to illustrate the opinion that we should keep traditional ways and skills alive or not depend on whether these particular ways or skills really help us or not.