Pls help me wth my Motivation Letter ^^

Hi,

I am writing Motivation letter for Master's degree, can anyone help me to check it and give me some comments.

Thanks so much

Dear Sir or Madam:

I am writing to apply for a Master's Degree Program in Chemistry starting in August 2013 in which I am particularly interested.

I graduated in Chemical with a bachelor degree in 2005 from Polytechnic University, my major was Inorganic chemical. My bachelor dissertation was Amalgam in Dentistry. Amalgam is an http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alloy of http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mercury_%28element%29 with various metals used for http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dental_filling. It commonly consists of http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mercury_%28element%29, http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Silver, http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tin, http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Copper, and other trace metals. Amalgam became the dental restorative material of choice due to its low cost, ease of application, strength, and durability. The purpose of thesis was to find the best ratios between Mercury and various metals in order to make a strong and long lasting filling which could withstand the pressure of chewing.

Although my major was inorganic chemical, with my chemical background I worked and learned in organic area after graduation. My first job was a Technician in a Cosmetics Manufacturer. I was responsible for researching and developing new formulas in Personal Care Industry which are skin care and hair care products. I had to make sure that my products should be efficient when using, reduced raw material cost and stable quality. I really enjoy my work and have been recognized as a high potential individual and have been sent for advanced training and development. After 4 years working in lab, I challenged myself by moving to a new position which was Sales Engineer in a Trade Company. In this position, I had been trained about pros and coins of raw materials, trends in personal care industry in the world and competitive suppliers. Through my education and work, I became passionate to learn more in Chemical, especially in Personal Care Industry.

The reason for choosing this specific Master Program comes from the fact that I can pursue the specialist area of interest that I developed during my previous studies and career. In addition, when applying for this program I will have the opportunity to gain specialized expertise in Chemical and study in an international environment to create new relationships with many people from different cultures.


Finally, I hope that I will have the opportunity to prove my abilities in the Master’s program. I look forward to hearing from you in the near future regarding the success of my application. Should you require further information of any kind, please contact me by contact information below.

Yours sincerely,