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In "Living to Work," Dorothy Sayers divides people into two categories according to the way they think about work. The people in one group "look upon work as a hateful necessity, whose only use is to make money for them, so that they can escape from work and do something else. They feel that only when the day's labor is over can they really begin to live and be themselves." The people in the other group ' look on their work as an opportunity for enjoyment and self-fulfillment. They only want to make money so that they may be free to devote themselves more single-mindedly to their work. Their work and their life are one thing." In your opinion, which of these definitions most accurately reflects the attitudes of young people preparing to enter the work force today? Write an essay takes a clear stand on this issue.

We now live in a world where people throw away their loves and passion for high pay jobs. In the article “Living to Work,” written by Dorothy Sayers states that young people only work in order to make more money whether or not they enjoy it and just do it to get it done. Having money is an important issues in our lives, but there are also many other things that we need to have. In order to make life its fullest, one must take steps to do what they want to do, not what benefits one will get from doing certain things.