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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.The charts illustrate the figure for water used for industry, agriculture and domestic purpose in North America, South America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia, and South East Asia. Overall, most water in the other regions uses for agriculture, such as South America, Africa, Central Asia, and South East Asia. While North America and Europe have the largest segments of water used for industry. Around 53% of water is spent on the industry in Europe. It is the largest segment of water used for industry in six areas. North America is the second area which has 48% water used for industry. In contrast, the figure for water used for agriculture in North America and Europe are the smallest segments, at 39% and 32% respectively. In comparison, 71%, 81%, 84% ad 88% water is spent on agriculture in South America, South East Asia, Africa, and Central Asia respectively, while water consumption for the industry in four areas are lower than in North America and Europe. Water consumption for domestic purpose is small segments in three areas, namely North America, South East Asia, and Europe, with 13%, 7%, and 15% respectively.

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The (What kind of charts? How many are there?) charts illustrate (wrong word) the figure (wrong word) for water used for industry, agriculture and domestic purpose in North America, South America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia, and South East Asia.

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Overall, most water in the other regions (??) uses for agriculture, such as South America, Africa, Central Asia, and South East Asia. (This sentence makes no sense.) While North America and Europe have the largest segments (wrong word) of water used for industry.

Around 53% of water is spent (wrong word. We spend money. We do not spend water. ) on the industry in Europe. It is the largest segment of water (wrong expression. ) used for industry in six areas. North America is the second area which has 48% water used for industry. In contrast, the figure (wrong word) for water used for agriculture in North America and Europe are the smallest segments, at 39% and 32% respectively.

In comparison, 71%, 81%, 84% ad 88% water is spent (wrong word) on agriculture in South America, South East Asia, Africa, and Central Asia respectively, while water consumption for the industry in four areas are lower than in North America and Europe. Water consumption for domestic purpose is small segments in three areas, namely North America, South East Asia, and Europe, with 13%, 7%, and 15% respectively.

Example essay: first two paragraphs:

The six pie charts divide water usage by three categories (Domestic, Agriculture, Industry) for large areas of the world. Each pie chart is specific to one of these areas, Europe, South East Asia, North America, Central Asia, South America and Africa.

Overall, three of these charts ( Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia) can be grouped together based on the fact that a very high proportion, more than 80%, of their water resources are used for agriculture. Two others, Europe and North America, are similar in that industry is the largest consumer (about half) with households being the smallest, consuming about 15%. The pattern of water usage in South America is closer to the first group, in that a high percentage (70%) goes to agriculture. It also has higher proportion devoted to domestic usage than Europe and North America (19%).

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