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Topic: Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

My essay:

It is sometimes argued that only difficult hobbies make people feel fun. Personally, I believe that not only difficult hobbies but people also have easy hobbies to be enjoyable. Therefore, I completely disagree with this idea.

First, people can enjoy easy hobbies because of their numerous advantages. For example, badminton is one of the popular sports in the world. It needs little equipment, simple and inexpensive. Moreover, people play badminton to develop their mentally and physically. Especially, people can lose weight and keep fit. Nowadays, both the elderly and children can enjoy playing badminton.

In addition, people who are too much busy with working and studying can be easier to spend time to play easy hobbies. Most people have spent too much time to sit and use the computer and smartphone, so it is important to spend their leisure time playing some easy hobbies, such as swimming or listening to music. Having much time to relax helps them can be more productive to study or work.

Second, difficult hobbies demand a great deal of things, such as health and specialized equipment, while easy hobbies are more convenient for all. For instance, climbing mountains requires a great deal of equipment and training, especially health. It is just suitable for a few people, especially young people, while most of the easy hobbies are suitable for many people. I believe that many easy hobbies give us many exciting feelings although they don't demand too much preparation.

In conclusion, it is true that difficult hobbies make people feel exciting but not only difficult hobbies but also easy hobbies have a great deal of advantages and more convenient for all to relax and unwind.