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UBJECT:-
Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well
What problems will your country face in the next ten years?
How can these problems be overcome?

ANSWER
Time 8.23

The top three issue , Poverty, Education and Population are prevailing around the globe. My country is also struggling with those problems and it is necessary that the problems would be understood before getting their solution to handle. I bring those issues and suggested methods to solve in subsequent sections.

Discussing, three major issue which are existing around the world, also impacting greatly to my country. India struggles with illiteracy, excessive number of people and the most epidemic problem poverty. My country’s illiteracy rate is increasing but still low as the desire, to be educated is no where; neither in government system, nor in the people. Similarly, population is the result of willingness and the hypothesis among the people that ‘the child is giving of God’ .Therefore, people does not hold to produce more children. The other problem poverty is also affecting and I think, It is mother of all problems. The Government does not have system so that people may be employed and second jobs are not in the market. For example the academic phd holder working as peon in government office.

On other side, looking the method to solve those problems in my country, I come to the conclusion that the society is rude and do not respect the humanity. For instance, people wish to donate to feed the hungry people but do not like to get the hungry one into employment. Secondly’ people do not like to rise, For example beggar likes to be beggar. It is because they are not educated and their moral is so down. In this scenario, the government can take step and open employment window portal at national level and integrate all employers to list the job in portal, On other side, open the institute which will educate the people according the potential they have. But, ultimately again it depends on the willingness of our government.

In a nutshell, my country struggles with three major problems but because there is lack of willingness in people and government, any methods to solve the problems does not applicable.

Time ends 8.48 = 24 minutes