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Anonymous Posted 17 years ago
Pls edit and correct this poem, ty :)
i see the pain in your sad eyes,
your sorrow falls like rain
brings pain in my heart,
if only i could take it all away
and bring you back in a place in your dreams.
out of this vain hope i want to hold you
but i'm afraid you might shatter and break.
so i keep my place, and stay here at all cost.
i hide away all my feelings for you
because its the only way to keep you truely safe.
even if my heart and soul is lost.
your sorrow falls like rain
brings pain in my heart,
if only i could take it all away
and bring you back in a place in your dreams.
out of this vain hope i want to hold you
but i'm afraid you might shatter and break.
so i keep my place, and stay here at all cost.
i hide away all my feelings for you
because its the only way to keep you truely safe.
even if my heart and soul is lost.
Top answer
I don't find much poetry here, sorry. If you will write it out as prose sentences, I will correct it for you.
- I don't find much poetry here, sorry.
- If you will write it out as prose sentences, I will correct it for you.
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I don't find much poetry here, sorry. If you will write it out as prose sentences, I will correct it for you.
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how about this sir?
i see the pain in your sad eyes,
your sorrow falls like rain
it brings pain in my heart,
if only i could take it all away
and bring you in a place in your dreams.
in vain hope i want to hold you
but only because i fear
you might shatter and break.
so i keep my place.
i hide away all my feelings for you
because its the
i see the pain in your sad eyes,
your sorrow falls like rain
it brings pain in my heart,
if only i could take it all away
and bring you in a place in your dreams.
in vain hope i want to hold you
but only because i fear
you might shatter and break.
so i keep my place.
i hide away all my feelings for you
because its the
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