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Hiya,
i'm new to this group. I'm writting my essay now. Just wanted some help...pls can u read thru this para & help me with suggestions on the sentences/structure. Thank you very much !
regards,
jack
There are many sights I came across when I first came to the UK last September that made me to think deeply about my own country. The Underground tube network, its complexity & the number of years in its history, the depth at which many tubes operate, the self-service ticketing system at railway stations, the large and sophisticated bascule London Tower Bridge, the old buildings and architecture offers breathtaking views of London that speak volumes of its heritage. So this made me think about how far behind my country & many other developing countries are. This makes me think I want do to something to see developing countries including mine to grow as highly developed country and fast-forward a few decades. And when it happens I want to be a part of that realisation.
i'm new to this group. I'm writting my essay now. Just wanted some help...pls can u read thru this para & help me with suggestions on the sentences/structure. Thank you very much !
regards,
jack
There are many sights I came across when I first came to the UK last September that made me to think deeply about my own country. The Underground tube network, its complexity & the number of years in its history, the depth at which many tubes operate, the self-service ticketing system at railway stations, the large and sophisticated bascule London Tower Bridge, the old buildings and architecture offers breathtaking views of London that speak volumes of its heritage. So this made me think about how far behind my country & many other developing countries are. This makes me think I want do to something to see developing countries including mine to grow as highly developed country and fast-forward a few decades. And when it happens I want to be a part of that realisation.
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Hi, i've re-drafted this for you - only made a few small changes - the English was generally very good - hope this helps. Joe. When I first came to the UK last September, there were many sights I came across that made me think deeply about my own country.
- Hi, i've re-drafted this for you - only made a few small changes - the English was generally very good - hope this helps.
- Joe.
- When I first came to the UK last September, there were many sights I came across that made me think deeply about my own country.
- The Underground tube network, its complexity & the length of its history, the depth at which many tubes operate, the self-service ticketing system at railway stations, the large and sophisticated bascule London Tower Bridge.
- The old buildings and architecture offer breathtaking views of London that speak volumes of its heritage.
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Hi, i've re-drafted this for you - only made a few small changes - the English was generally very good - hope this helps.
Joe.
When I first came to the UK last September, there were many sights I came across that made me think deeply about my own country. The Underground tube network, its complexity & the length of its history, the depth at which many tubes operate, the self-servic
Joe.
When I first came to the UK last September, there were many sights I came across that made me think deeply about my own country. The Underground tube network, its complexity & the length of its history, the depth at which many tubes operate, the self-servic
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