Pls! Check This Writing Essay (IELTS Task 1) For Me!

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Topic: The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002

The table below provides information about percentage of national consumer expenditure in five countries by category in 2002.

Overall, items: food, drinks and tobacco were the highest percentage in five countries. And a last, there were Leisure and Education.

On food, drinks and tobacco items, Turkey was the country, which had highest consumers, at nearly 32,14%. In contrast, Sweden had the lowest consumers, with 15,77%. On clothing and footwear, Italy contributed the most consumers, at 9%. There were Turkey, Spain, Ireland and Sweden respectively. Regarding the Leisure and Education, Turkey hitted a high in 2002, at 4,35%. In the meantime, Spain was the lowest percentage of consumer expenditure.

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Teechr · Accepted Answer

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AlpheccaStars · Answer

You wrote 108 words. The minimum is 150. You will get a lower score because you did not write enough words.

Also, you did not correctly do this task.
A consumer is a person who buys things. You did not use the word "consumer" correctly.

The table ~~below~~ provides information about (Information about something would tell things like when the money was spent, where it was spent, who spent it, and for what purpose was it spent. That is not what the table contains.) percentage of national consumer expenditure in five countries (What are these countries?) by category (What are the categories? How many categories? Your first paragraph is not complete. ) in 2002.

Model paragraph #1: Describe the table, but not any data:

The table gives the percentage of consumers' spending on three different categories in 2002. These consumers are grouped by their country and five different countries are listed: Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey. The categories are food, beverages and tobacco; clothing and footwear; and leisure and education.

Overall, items: food, drinks and tobacco were the highest percentage (wrong verb. Food is not a percentage.) in five countries (Which countries are you writing about?) . And a last, (That is not good English) there were Leisure and Education.

Model Paragraph #2: Write about two or three most important observations:

Overall, people in these five countries spent the most on food, drinks and tobacco and the least on leisure and education. The citizens of Turkey spent more on these items than people in the other countries, a total of about 43%. Swedes spent the least, about 24%.

On food, drinks and tobacco items, Turkey was the country, which had highest consumers, (A high consumer would be a tall person.) at nearly 32,14%. In contrast, Sweden had the lowest consumers, (Short people?) with 15,77%. On clothing and footwear, Italy contributed the most consumers, (Wrong, That means the number of consumers, such as 15 million.) at 9%. There were Turkey, Spain, Ireland and Sweden respectively. Regarding the Leisure and Education, Turkey hitted (wrong verb, wrong form) a high in 2002, at 4,35%. In the meantime, Spain was the lowest percentage (Wrong verb. A country is not an expenditure. A country is a nation with citizens.) of consumer expenditure.

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