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0 Government does not do a good job in helping the poor. According to governments' data in 2005 , the number of poor family has increased at 80000 household as double as the data of 1996 with 40000 household. Furthermore. government legislate some policies as unfair to low income groups .For example those registered labour unions would have to pay NT$24 per month for national health insurance, compared with average income groups. As a result, the gap between the poor and rich in Taiwan has extended widely since 2000. 02 br
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00 Recently government has focused on reducing the unemployed rate and also tried finding efficient strategies. By contrast , it seems to be fail because the unemployed rate has gone up significantly , particularly in rural areas. In addition , government opens cheaper working from south-east Asia.Therefoer companies prefer hiring those workers rather than Taiwanese.It is obviosly that government has just shown the policies about umemployed, in fact , government does not execute the policies in Taiwan. 02 br
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00 Recently government has focused on reducing the unemployed rate and also tried finding efficient strategies. By contrast , it seems to be fail because the unemployed rate has gone up significantly , particularly in rural areas. In addition , government opens cheaper working from south-east Asia.Therefoer companies prefer hiring those workers rather than Taiwanese.It is obviosly that government has just shown the policies about umemployed, in fact , government does not execute the policies in Taiwan. 02 br
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0 You have problems with determiners, plurals, verb tenses, prepositions and general grammatical structure. I've corrected the first paragraph for you and highlighed problems in the second. 02 br 02 br 01 b 00 The 02 b 00 government does not do a good job in helping the poor.
- 0 You have problems with determiners, plurals, verb tenses, prepositions and general grammatical structure.
- I've corrected the first paragraph for you and highlighed problems in the second.
- 02 br 02 br 01 b 00 The 02 b 00 government does not do a good job in helping the poor.
- According to 01 b 00 the 02 b 00 governments' data in 2005 , the number of poor 01 b 00 families 02 b 00 has increased 01 b 00 to 02 b 00 01 b 00 80,000 02 b 00 01 b 00 households, 02 b 00 01 b 00 doubling from the 02 b 00 01 b 00 1996 figure of 02 b 00 01 b 00 40,000 households 02 b 00 .
- For example 01 b 00 , 02 b 00 those registered 01 b 00 with 02 b 00 labour unions 01 b 00 have 02 b 00 to pay NT$24 per month for national health insurance, ( 01 b 00 compared with average income groups - you can't say this without clearly stating the comparison.
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0 You have problems with determiners, plurals, verb tenses, prepositions and general grammatical structure. I've corrected the first paragraph for you and highlighed problems in the second. In the second paragraph you have started inserting a space before commas, which is incorrect. 02 br
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01 b 00 The 02 b 00 government does not do a good job in helping the poor
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