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Short plot
When three friends encounter a ghost in the car park at night, it brings bad lucks to them, and it destroy the entire families when they seek evil masters for assistance.
Long plot
When three friends, Lam, Malcom and Wu encounter a ghost at a car park, strange things begin to happen. As Lam faces financial trouble when his loan application gets rejected; Malcolm suspects his wife of having an affair with her boss. Meanwhile, Wu is the only one among the three who can see spirits and he goes around asking every spirits about his father who passes way. In order to survive, they seek a “Shaman” help. However, are they using the wrong way? Can the men conquer the nature?
Short plot
When three friends encounter a ghost in the car park at night, it brings bad lucks to them, and it destroy the entire families when they seek evil masters for assistance.
Long plot
When three friends, Lam, Malcom and Wu encounter a ghost at a car park, strange things begin to happen. As Lam faces financial trouble when his loan application gets rejected; Malcolm suspects his wife of having an affair with her boss. Meanwhile, Wu is the only one among the three who can see spirits and he goes around asking every spirits about his father who passes way. In order to survive, they seek a “Shaman” help. However, are they using the wrong way? Can the men conquer the nature?
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I have some corrections for you: Short plot When three friends encounter a ghost in the car park at night, it brings bad luck to them, and it destroy s the ir entire families when they seek evil masters for assistance. Long plot When three friends, Lam, Malcom and Wu encounter a ghost at a car park, strange things begin to happen. As Lam faces financial trouble when his loan application gets rejected, Malcolm suspects his wife of having an affair with her boss.
- I have some corrections for you: Short plot When three friends encounter a ghost in the car park at night, it brings bad luck to them, and it destroy s the ir entire families when they seek evil masters for assistance.
- Long plot When three friends, Lam, Malcom and Wu encounter a ghost at a car park, strange things begin to happen.
- As Lam faces financial trouble when his loan application gets rejected, Malcolm suspects his wife of having an affair with her boss.
- Meanwhile, Wu is the only one among the three who can see spirits, and he goes around asking every spirit about his father who passed away.
- In order to survive, they seek a “Shaman 's ” help.
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I have some corrections for you:
Short plot
When three friends encounter a ghost in the car park at night, it brings bad luck to them, and it destroys their entire families when they seek evil masters for assistance.
Long plot
When three friends, Lam, Malcom and Wu encounter a ghost at a car park, strange things begin to happen. As Lam faces financial
Short plot
When three friends encounter a ghost in the car park at night, it brings bad luck to them, and it destroys their entire families when they seek evil masters for assistance.
Long plot
When three friends, Lam, Malcom and Wu encounter a ghost at a car park, strange things begin to happen. As Lam faces financial
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Thank you for your correction, sir. By the way, would it be nice if I change the last line as:
However, why the trio believe in evil spirits yet don't believe in ***?
However, why the trio believe in evil spirits yet don't believe in ***?
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Can I say like this:
When three friends, Lam, Malcom and Wu encounter a ghost at a car park, strange things begin to happen. As Lam faces financial trouble when his loan application gets rejected, Malcolm suspects his wife of having an affair with her boss. Meanwhile, Wu is the only one among the three who can see spirits, and he goes around asking every spirit about his father who passed
When three friends, Lam, Malcom and Wu encounter a ghost at a car park, strange things begin to happen. As Lam faces financial trouble when his loan application gets rejected, Malcolm suspects his wife of having an affair with her boss. Meanwhile, Wu is the only one among the three who can see spirits, and he goes around asking every spirit about his father who passed
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