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Suddenly Cinderella comes back home, she see Sam is in her house, and eating the chocolate, so she starts shout at him, she thinks Sam is a thief, she threw the pots at him, Sam pulls Cinderella`s both arm and calls Cinderella to calm down, and start to tall her the reason why he is here, unexpectedly her stepmother and her sisters come back home, they see the house is a mass, and they thought Cinderella is hugging with Sam, so her stepmother turns she and Sam out of the house, Cinderella and Sam want to explane, but her step mother does not listen, and she just call her sisters to throw her things outside.
Cinderella feels despair and decide to go to the castle to find the prince, she takes her luggage with her. Sam feels sorry to Cinderella, but he do not know what can he do, so he follow Cinderella.
They walk in the forest, and pass the river, through the jungle finally, they arrive to the castle, but when they arrive, it is half year later, the prince is already get marry, Cinderella feels desperation.
At this time, they heard an old man is talking a legend, the legend say that there is a wizard that live in the desert, and she has a time machine can let the time return, but many warrior died in the way they go.
Sam heard that and decides to left Cinderella, and go himself, he wants to do this to apologize to Cinderella, first Cinderella refuse, but afterward she is convince by Sam.
The next day Sam set off to go to the desert, On the way to the desert, he beats the camel Legion and the eagle Legion, finally he saw the wizard`s house it`s on the top of cactus, he must climb up the cactus or he won`t go in to the house, he wants to give up, but when he think of Cinderella, he feels sorry for her, so he climb up the cactus, then he arrive the house, he saw the time machine, he starts to turn the time back to the day he went to Cinderella`s house, when he try to turn the last number, the wizard aware, and wants to make him in to a stone carving, Then Cinderella arise, formerly Cinderella follows him all away , then they beat the wizard together, finally they turn the last number.
Cinderella feels despair and decide to go to the castle to find the prince, she takes her luggage with her. Sam feels sorry to Cinderella, but he do not know what can he do, so he follow Cinderella.
They walk in the forest, and pass the river, through the jungle finally, they arrive to the castle, but when they arrive, it is half year later, the prince is already get marry, Cinderella feels desperation.
At this time, they heard an old man is talking a legend, the legend say that there is a wizard that live in the desert, and she has a time machine can let the time return, but many warrior died in the way they go.
Sam heard that and decides to left Cinderella, and go himself, he wants to do this to apologize to Cinderella, first Cinderella refuse, but afterward she is convince by Sam.
The next day Sam set off to go to the desert, On the way to the desert, he beats the camel Legion and the eagle Legion, finally he saw the wizard`s house it`s on the top of cactus, he must climb up the cactus or he won`t go in to the house, he wants to give up, but when he think of Cinderella, he feels sorry for her, so he climb up the cactus, then he arrive the house, he saw the time machine, he starts to turn the time back to the day he went to Cinderella`s house, when he try to turn the last number, the wizard aware, and wants to make him in to a stone carving, Then Cinderella arise, formerly Cinderella follows him all away , then they beat the wizard together, finally they turn the last number.
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You need to start each sentence with a capital letter and end it with a period (not a comma). Until you do that, nobody will have enough patience to struggle with your text. Clive
- You need to start each sentence with a capital letter and end it with a period (not a comma).
- Until you do that, nobody will have enough patience to struggle with your text.
- Clive
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You need to start each sentence with a capital letter and end it with a period (not a comma).
Until you do that, nobody will have enough patience to struggle with your text.
Clive
Until you do that, nobody will have enough patience to struggle with your text.
Clive
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