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Rsharma Posted 16 years ago
Grammar

Please suggest the misteks and correct the sentence structure

I would like to tell you a brief story of noida PBS as to how we coped up with our problems. When we started the campaign there was a guy Mike who was handling the PBS team. We started off with ACE-FS and honestly speaking our knowledge about this campaign was inadequate and blurred. The major problem we had, we were not able to differentiate between ACE-FS and CPG and we kept calling companies without knowing the fact. If you can recall the conversation when I asked to send the difference between ACE-FS and CPG actually that mail has raised the curtain from our eyes. This is the reason why I was not able to deliver the correct data earlier. I would like to inform you that I have taken out 1000 companies from Isell which I had divided according to the company types (FS OR CPG). When checked the data I found the major chunk of CPG as compare to FS. As per your instruction are calling on CPG.

  

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rsharma: It would help your readers if you wrote the full name of any acronym the first time you use it. In the US, PBS is Public Broadcasting System. I have no idea what you mean when you use abbreviations without any explanation.

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  • rsharma: It would help your readers if you wrote the full name of any acronym the first time you use it.
  • In the US, PBS is Public Broadcasting System.
  • I have no idea what you mean when you use abbreviations without any explanation.
  • ) PBS and as to how we coped up with our problems.
  • When we started the campaign (comma) there was a guy , Mike , who was handling the PBS team.
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rsharma: It would help your readers if you wrote the full name of any acronym the first time you use it. In the US, PBS is Public Broadcasting System. I have no idea what you mean when you use abbreviations without any explanation.

I would like to tell you a brief story of noida (proper noun?) PBS and as to how we coped up with our problems. When we
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Could please tell me if its correct now ?







I would like to tell you a brief story of noida PBS (Prosoft Buisness Group)and how we coped with our problems. When we started the campaign there was a guy, Mike, who was handling the PBS team. We started off with ACE-FS and, honestly speaking our knowledge about this campaign was inadequate and blurred. The major c
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Hi,
No, there are still quite a few errors in this version.

For example, noida is probably a proper noun. Proper nouns must be capitalized. The phrase "honestly speaking" should be set off by commas.
Also, you did not explain all the other acronyms, such as ACE-FS and CPG.

The major challenge we had, (no comma here, and fill in the missing words) we were no
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