please strictly check the grammar of this short notice

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Hello,

I had an argument with my friend regarding the following notice given to the students of an academic institution. can anyone please correct each grammar errors and also comment on the style?

-It is hereby noticed to all students, who have not taken admission, do well to take admission earliest between 10th of June to 16th of June 2013 for intermediate science classes.The regular integrated classes shall commence after the holidays i.e. 17th June.

It is further noticed that the classes shall remain suspended for the coming holidays, 14th June TO 16th June. Office will remain open for admission and other purposes. -

Question 1. In addition to other things, I would also want to know the frequency of the use of the word 'notice'[as a verb] meaning 'given a notice used in the above context. Is it accepted as standard english or even good English?

question 2. Secondly I would like to know, if the word 'suspended' used in the second paragraph of the letter is used frequently in the way it is used above.

question 3. The 'do' in the phrase 'do well' seems like a bare infinitve. is it a correct use in the context above? will the sentence be more correct with "would do well" than just "do well"?

question 4. I have just come to know that take admission does not mean anything in english. But it is common expression in India and it means paying money and registering for some course.

question 5. shouldn't the word 'earliest' be replaced by 'at the earliest'? 'Take admission earliest' sounds incomplete to me.

question 6. Is it ok to say between 10th to 16th june? Shouldn't the preposition 'between' be replaced by 'from' as the preposition 'to' is between the two dates-10th and 16th. Or is it better to keep the 'between' and replace the 'to' by 'and' [for example: between 10th and 16th june?

question 7. Is it ok to use 'will' in place of 'shall' in the last sentence?

question 8. I would like to discuss the word 'admission'. It is often used here in this part of india. Students come to private academic institutions and attend classes for two months [the period between two academic sessions] these classes are provided free of cost. But as soon as the new session starts, they have to pay their fees and 'take admission'in oder to be eligible to attend classes regularly. Is that what enrolment means?

Please spare no criticism. I want an 100% honest assessment of the notice. It does not matter even if it offends the person who has composed this letter. Both of us have agreed to wait for an honest appraisal of the writing.

Thank you in advance

Enoon · Accepted Answer

bubu prasantQuestion 1. In addition to other things, I would also want to know the frequency of the use of the word 'notice'[as a verb] meaning 'given a notice used in the above context. Is it accepted as standard english or even good English?

No. Use "announced".

bubu prasantquestion 2. Secondly I would like to know, if the word 'suspended' used in the second paragraph of the letter is used frequently in the way it is used above.

That seems OK.

bubu prasantquestion 3. The 'do' in the phrase 'do well' seems like a bare infinitve. is it a correct use in the context above? will the sentence be more correct with "would do well" than just "do well"?

The sentence had no subject, so the form of the verb is moot.

bubu prasantquestion 4. I have just come to know that take admission does not mean anything in english. But it is common expression in India and it means paying money and registering for some course.

"Take admission" is clear enough.

bubu prasantquestion 5. shouldn't the word 'earliest' be replaced by 'at the earliest'? 'Take admission earliest' sounds incomplete to me.

I would need the writer to explain what he meant there. It's indecipherable for me.

bubu prasantquestion 6. Is it ok to say between 10th to 16th june? Shouldn't the preposition 'between' be replaced by 'from' as the preposition 'to' is between the two dates-10th and 16th. Or is it better to keep the 'between' and replace the 'to' by 'and' [for example: between 10th and 16th june?

Use "between X and Y" or "from "X to Y". In both cases it is not clear whether the end dates are included, so you have to put it more explicitly if it matters, and it does here.

bubu prasantquestion 7. Is it ok to use 'will' in place of 'shall' in the last sentence?

I'm American, so I say yes. I don't know how to use "shall".

bubu prasantquestion 8. I would like to discuss the word 'admission'. It is often used here in this part of india. Students come to private academic institutions and attend classes for two months [the period between two academic sessions] these classes are provided free of cost. But as soon as the new session starts, they have to pay their fees and 'take admission'in oder to be eligible to attend classes regularly. Is that what enrolment means?

I would use "enroll".

If you want criticism, it was obviously written by someone with imperfect English skills, and it is so unclear that the students who are supposed to follow it are in trouble.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

-It is hereby noticed to all students, who have not taken admission, do well to take admission earliest between 10th of June to 16th of June 2013 for intermediate science classes.The regular integrated classes shall commence after the holidays i.e. 17th June.

It is further noticed that the classes shall remain suspended for the coming holidays, 14th June TO 16th June. Office will remain open for admission and other purposes

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The style is Indian English, which tends to be overly formal and elevated, with the tonality and verbiage of Victorian English hearkening back to the Raj. These writers try to imbue their writing with an aura of haughty imperialism and blue-bloodedness.
But to a 21st century American ear in the age of the Internet, it sounds self-aggrandizing and comical to the point of ridicule.
An American would compose something simple, direct and business-like that would be easy for the students to understand.

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