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Anonymous Posted 13 years ago
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Please say if any mistakes?
about photography
They hesitated a long time before deciding to do an engagement session. They got in New York right before all the flights were cancelled and thought that the photos would be under a gray cloudy sky. But then, the blizzard came…and went to leave behind an amazing Central Park covered in snow. It was sunny today, what a luck! In Central Park, everybody was skiing (really!), riding on sleds… It felt like a holiday!
We crossed the Brooklyn Bridge right after that to take a few more [pictures] with the skyline of Manhattan in the background. There was almost no one there, the snow was blown away by the wind on the top of the buildings.
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They hesitated a long time before deciding to do an engagement session. They got in New York right before all the flights were cancelled and thought that the photos would be under a gray cloudy sky. But then, the blizzard came…and went to leave behind an amazing Central Park covered in snow. It was sunny today, what a luck! In Central Park, everybody was skiing (really!), riding on sleds… It felt like a holiday!
We crossed the Brooklyn Bridge right after that to take a few more [pictures] with the skyline of Manhattan in the background. There was almost no one there, the snow was blown away by the wind on the top of the buildings.
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" (or lucky me) 5) Putting an indefinite article before "Central Park" should rather be avoided: "leaving behind Central Park covered in snow and looking amazing"
- " (or lucky me) 5) Putting an indefinite article before "Central Park" should rather be avoided: "leaving behind Central Park covered in snow and looking amazing"
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That's excellent writing, very few mistakes and none of them spoiling the whole or obscuring the meaning:
1) perhaps "landed in New York" or "arrived in New York" would be more suitable
2) "the photos would be TAKEN under a gray cloudy sky" (I guess you've accidentally skipped the TAKEN there)
3) "the snow was blown away by the wind FROM TOPS of the buildings"
The following could
1) perhaps "landed in New York" or "arrived in New York" would be more suitable
2) "the photos would be TAKEN under a gray cloudy sky" (I guess you've accidentally skipped the TAKEN there)
3) "the snow was blown away by the wind FROM TOPS of the buildings"
The following could
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