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The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours.Write a letter to the local council. In your letter:+Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly+ Explain how this affecting you and your neighbours+ Suggest what should be done about the problemDear SirToday, I write this letter to the local council because I want to express my annoyance in past days. Not only me, but also my neighbours are very angry with the rubbish collection system in our area.It is not working correctly in recent months. The main problem is garbage trucks come to our houses for taking garbage in garbage cart very late. They ought to have come at least once a week, but they have come once every two weeks and it is a very bad thing for us. Why do they come so late while the cost for rubbish collection system is high and we must pay monthly? It is unbelievable!This thing affecting me and my neighbours very much. Here are reasons:First: We eat food every day, and many of us have leftover such as meat, seafood, milk, vegetables and other kinds of food that we waste. Then, we drop them into the garbage cart. The delay rubbishes makes food be stinking and smelly. Moreover, mice and other insects usually find food in garbage cart at night, and they likely to go to our house for finding food because houses are near to the garbage cart. Last night, there were so lots of mice at garbage carts that I could hear their cries clearly when I was on my bed.Second: Some of my neighbours have baby, pets. So, when babies or pets do poo-poo, they drop feces into the garbage cart. The delay rubbishes makes our area stinks during three or four days, it is really horrible!There are still many bad things about this problem I want to tell you, but I do not have much time. As a result, I suggest local council has to have a solution for awful things that my neighbours and I are suffering. I would like to propose that you should contact to the leader of rubbish collection system in Reindeer County and tell him that people in Ward 14 are very angry with his team because they take rubbish once every two weeks and people in that area want the rubbish collection system has to collect garbage twice a week, or at least once a week so that our area will be cleaner.FaithfullyMartin

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Dear Sir

Today, I write this letter to the local council because I want to express my annoyance in past days. Not only me, but also my neighbours are very angry with the rubbish collection system in our area.

It is not working correctly in recent months. The main problem is garbage trucks come to our houses for taking garbage in garbage cart very late. They ought to have come at least once a week, but they have come once every two weeks and it is a very bad thing for us. Why do they come so late while the cost for rubbish collection system is high and we must pay monthly? It is unbelievable!

This thing affecting me and my neighbours very much. Here are the reasons:

First: We eat food every day, and many of us have leftovers such as meat, seafood, milk, vegetables and other kinds of food that we waste. Then, we drop them into the garbage cart. The delay rubbishes makes food be stinking and smelly. Moreover, mice and ~~other~~ insects usually find food in garbage cart at night, and they likely to go to our house for finding food because houses are near to the garbage cart. Last night, there were so lots of mice at garbage carts that I could hear their cries clearly when I was on my bed.

Second: Some of my neighbours have baby, pets. So, when babies or pets do poo-poo, they drop ***** into the garbage cart. The delay rubbishes makes our area stinks during three or four days, it is really horrible!

There are still many bad things about this problem I want to tell you, but I do not have much time. As a result, I suggest the local council has to provide ~~have~~ a solution for awful things that my neighbours and I are suffering. I would like to propose that you ~~should~~ contact to the leader of rubbish collection system in Reindeer County and tell him that people in Ward 14 are very angry with his team because they take rubbish once every two weeks and people in that area want the rubbish collection system has to collect garbage twice a week, or at least once a week so that our area will be cleaner.

Faithfully

Martin

This letter has your content and only 200 words.

Dear Sir

I am writing this letter today to complain about the poor rubbish collection service in Ward 14 over the past several months. The garbage trucks are supposed to come at least once a week, but they have been coming once every two weeks. This has caused many problems for us.

We discard leftovers such as meat, seafood, milk, and vegetables in the waste bins. After one or two days, the bins are stinky and smelly. Moreover, mice and insects eat the rotting food, and then come into our houses. Last night, there were so many mice in the garbage containers that I could hear their cries clearly when I was lying in bed. In addition, some of my neighbors have babies and pets, and they put the ***** in the bins. This adds to the horrible stench. Our entire neighborhood smells like raw sewage.

Something must be done to restore the garbage collection to its normal schedule of twice a week. I would like to propose that you contact the manager of rubbish collection system in Reindeer County and tell him of our situation in Ward 14 and ask him to resume the service that we are paying for.

Faithfully

Martin

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