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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

Leisure time in a typical week in hour- by sex and employment status, 1998-99.

The given bar graph depicts how the amount of recreation time varies between two genders with different occupations from 1998 to 1999.

Overall, due to the characteristics of the last century, men did not attend part-time jobs and household works, which result in no leisure time in these categories.

Concerning the male gender, those who are unemployed and retired made up the highest proportion of leisure time per week with approximately 83 and 82 hours, respectively, which were nearly twice as much as time spent by full-time employees at about 42 hours. Unsurprisingly, homemakers and part-time employed males made up no leisure time.
Turning to the remaining sex, interestingly, females experienced the same pattern as their male counterparts. Unemployed and retired women spent the highest amount of time in leisure activities, both at nearly 80 hours, which were double that of the employed. In contrast, full-time employees accounted for the lowest amount of time with about 37 hours. Additionally, housewives spent an average of 50 hours a week as leisure time, which was a considerable amount of time concerning the surveyed years.