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Anonymous Posted 8 years ago
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Of course we were sad as we knew he was going to die soon, but it was also kind of a relief at last because we could see he was suffering.

Anything you would change?

  

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I forgot "at the time" after "sad". Don't know if it changes anything.

  • I forgot "at the time" after "sad".
  • Don't know if it changes anything.
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I forgot "at the time" after "sad". Don't know if it changes anything.

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Of course we were sad at the time as we knew he was going to die soon, but it was also kind of a relief at last because we could see he was suffering.

There has to be a comma after "time".

The "it" after "but" has a phantom antecedent; you mean "our knowledge of the the nearness of his death", but you don't write it. The reader goes on a wild goose chase.

"At last" is

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Thank you Anonymous. There seems to be too many problems with it, so I'll try something else:

He had been ill for a long time. And of course it was hard to see him go, but it was also kind of a relief at last, because he was suffering a lot.

(It was a relief for them during the last period of his illness knowing that he would soon get peace)

Is this more clear or do you detec

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