Please Review One Sentence
I had my statement of purpose for graduate admissions proofread by an editor, but after that I needed to modify some sentences in it.
Then, could you please tell me if you find any point that should be changed to improve grammar and/or vocabulary in the following sentence?
Your Department of Linguistics also has Dr. XXX, whose research interests include Japanese linguistics, which may make it possible for me to proceed with my research from the perspective of comparative linguistics.
Top answer
I feel that this version reads more smoothly. eg In addition, y our Department of Linguistics has Dr. ***, whose research interest in Japanese linguistics will facilitate my own research from the perspective of comparative linguistics.
- I feel that this version reads more smoothly.
- eg In addition, y our Department of Linguistics has Dr.
- ***, whose research interest in Japanese linguistics will facilitate my own research from the perspective of comparative linguistics.
- Note that I have changed 'may' to 'will'.
- 'May' sounds a bit weak .
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I feel that this version reads more smoothly.
eg In addition, your Department of Linguistics has Dr. ***, whose research interest in Japanese linguistics will facilitate my own research from the perspective of comparative linguistics.
Note that I have changed 'may' to 'will'. 'May' sounds a bit weak.
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