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Topic: Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, it is undeniable that a considerable budget and time has been used for the protection of wild animals. Nevertheless, some people advocate that human merit that money and time more than wild animals do. In my perspective, the government should allocate the fund using for wild animals' to increase humans' life standard.

It is understandable that wildlife creatures' safety is prominent, a single extinction of a kind can put its predator at brick of extinction. Moreover, experiment on animals have brought a great deal of successes in the medicine field, many ailments have been cured by testing on rat and other kinds of animals.

However, the money and time should be utilised for human's financial support

To begin with, more and more people have to suffer health ailment and family loss due to civil war and fight between nations. Take Iraq as an example, civil war has taken away lives, families, houses, lands... Citizens from countries like this deserve help more than wild creatures. With financial aid, lives can be saved, houses can be rebuilt and poverty will be alleviated. Moreover, even citizens in countries that are in their peaceful period are struggling, homeless and illiterate people are craving for a better life .Therefore, we need to put animals aside temporary to help our own kind .

Taking all into consideration , I am convinced that human worth more money and time support than animals. Nevertheless, we can partially help animal by raising people's awareness , replant trees to rebuild animals' habitat and many more simple action that doesn't have financial demand.