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TOPIC:

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

MY ESSAY:

People have different views about whether sports facilities are the best option to improve people’s health. In my view, both sports centers and other measures are equally important and should apply together to enhance public health.

There are some reasons why sports facilities made an impact on society. Firstly, everybody can choose and participate in different kinds of sports which they are interested in with the best quality coming from sports facilities because most of them are invested by the governments or local authorities with a lot of money. For example, almost all football fields are located in huge stadiums in city centers. Secondly, for some sports, it is compulsory to have trainers to keep people practicing right so they do not have to deal with injuries or accidents. Because of that, the result that people can achieve from practicing in sports facilities is much better than doing it at home or by themselves.

However, I also believe that not only public sports centers but also other measures are necessary for public health. In particular, we should consider the time spent when people exercise. Not all people live near sports centers so they have to figure out the most convenient methods to improve their health without consuming a lot of their time on moving from home to certain places to practice or preparing costumes and tools. Additionally, choosing suitable methods in terms of exercise depends a lot on personality. For example, introverts are really afraid of crowded places so they need to exercise in their own home.

In conclusion, increasing the number of sports facilities contributes to improving public health but it is even better if there are other measures.