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In some countries levels of health and fitness are decreasing and average weights are increasing.

What do you think are the causes of these problems and what are some possible solutions?

My essay:

Nowadays, there is a significant decline in the proportion of people who do exercise and have good health, whereas average weights have an opposite trend. I think that one of the main reasons is that they have a busy life, and some measures could be taken to address these issues.

With the rapid development of economy and technology, people become busier to work and study and that is a primary cause for falling levels of health and fitness and rising average weights. People spend most of their time on working and studying and they do not have time to go to the gym, do exercise. To save time, they often choose fast foods which contain a lot of cholesterol – a substance leads to obesity, instead of cooking or going to the restaurant for a balanced diet. In Ho Chi Minh city, for instance, there are a lot of food vans, food carts on the road, and people often stop at there and buy their meal.

To tackle those problems, there are some solutions that can be taken. Companies should connect with the gym centers and give a specific schedule for each employee. The government should impose a ban on selling foods on the streets, which not only pushes the people cooking meal at home but also reduces the traffic jam and shortens the time to go the offices. In my company, for example, there is a competition called “happy meal”, which asks the employees to bring their self-prepared foods to the workplace for breakfast and lunch.

In conclusion, decreasing in the levels of health and fitness and increasing in average weights are a result of a busy life. To address these issues, some mentioned solutions could be taken.