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Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

One school of thought holds that accomplishment in sport is determined by physical strength, while some insist that mental strength is the main factor contributing to success in sport. This essay attempts to shed light on both perspectives before concluding that I am in favour of the former notion.

On the one hand, a strong mental health helps athletes to overcome difficulties more easily. When sport players confront an obstacle, they might still be optimistic about their possibilities to win prizes; therefore, they can be determined to perform their best and strive for the first prize. For instance, Hoang Xuan Vinh, a shooter represented for Vietnam in Olympic 2016: although he was not in the lead at first, he still managed to retain his dignity throughout his performance; thus, he won the gold medal.

On the other hand, I think physical strength is the key factor to achieve success in sport. Should sport players not have a strong physical body, they will often struggle with their performances and cannot reach their full potential, especially in sports requiring robust physical health such as soccer, boxing, lifting. As a result, they cannot win prizes and fail to achieve their goals. In contrast, athletes who have a strong physical health might still claim the first prize although they might not have the best mental health condition.

In conclusion, while nobody can deny the vital role of mental health in sports, I would contend that it is physical strength which has the most influence on sport players’ performances.

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