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Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace
Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages

Technological advancements have allowed employees to work remotely, without the need to commute to workplace. In this essay, I will discuss the advantages, such as employee satisfaction and reduction of costs, with lower productivity as an issue and state the reasons why I think the benefits outweigh such drawback.

From the employees’ perspective, working from home is a golden opportunity for them to spend time for family. At the comfort of being in their house, they are able to contribute to their organisations while being able to take care of their families. Moreover, it would be convenient for some employees to work using online platforms when traveling, instead of having to take leaves. The result is an improvement in satisfaction, which can affect employees’ loyalty to the company. Another clear benefit is lower expenses and increase safety. Without having to commute to work, traveling cost would be cut down while fewer traffic accidents happen as a result of less private transport on the road.

However, remote working can potentially cause a lack of discipline among employees, since they are not present at their workplace. This means that they are not monitored by supervisors, consequently, the quality of products and services they provide can be lowered. But I think that even if employees are at their traditional workplace, sometimes they are distracted, doing trivial tasks such as playing games just because they feel stressed from work. If they are given permission to work from home and their salary is based on their performance, I believe productivity will not be a problem for remote working.

To conclude, though there are pros and cons to work-from-home practice, I believe the satisfaction and lower expenses it provides are more of an advantageous development.

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