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What distinguishes young people from their parents' or grandparents' generation is a lack of physical exercise. Today's generation are spending far too long playing computer games, chatting aimlessly on social networking sites or simply watching TV, and too little time being active.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that the older generations are more physically active compared to younger ones. Presently, youngsters are under heavy criticism for wasting their time on entertaining themselves instead of participating in physical activities. While it is true that several young people tend to ignore regular exercise, I am inclined to think that the majority of them are taking this responsibility seriously.

On the one hand, with technological advancements in recent decades, young users currently have a wide variety of entertainment options. As a result, some of them become addicted to the social network or playing computer games. It is the sedentary nature of these activities that discourages physical exercise. Moreover, as most families nowadays enjoy a higher standard of living, families no longer place a huge emphasis on physical activities to strengthen their children’s muscles. Consequently, some teenagers have a tendency to neglect to do exercise because a routine is not imposed by their parents.

On the other hand, with the advent of online health applications, young people are increasingly conscious of their health. Because these apps can be downloaded from the Internet, youngsters can access information, including the amount of distance walked or the number of calories consumed. In this sense, being able to track their physical progress gives young individuals an incentive to raise the intensity of their exercise. In addition to this, with more and more gymnasiums established across the globe, young people have the best equipment available to improve their strength. Furthermore, young persons are also inspired by either celebrities from social networking sites or sportspeople from television programs. Because these people are capable of maintaining an attractive appearance through physical activities, young audiences are likely to follow in the same footsteps.
In conclusion, modern ways of living undoubtedly make certain young people less eager to do physical exercise. However, the current period also presents these young age groups more opportunities to adopt a healthier lifestyle and efficiently increase their strength and flexibility through sports and exercise.