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The diagram illustrates the process of the production of ceramic pots. Overall, there are eleven main steps in this process, begining with the collection of raw materials and ending with the finished pots produced.

In the first stage of the process, raw materials are collected using a digger and they are transported by a truck to a factory where they undergo further processing. After that, they are crushed into powder and then is mixed with water. Next, the resulting mixture is poured into a mould to create the shape of pots and dried during from 6 hours to 8 hours and they are assembled clay pots.

In the next stage of the process, these clay pots are placed in a oven and heated at a high temperature about 1000 degrees celsisus. Following this, the pots are coloured, put into in a clolour firing to become finished pots and ready for sale for retailers.

Lê Thị Thanh Trúc · Accepted Answer

I do not have many ideas for writing the process. I hope that anyone can help me review my task.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

You did not include the essay instructions. The picture is too small to make out. Next time, please give us a break.

The diagram below shows one method of manufacturing ceramic pots.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

The diagram illustrates one of the ways in which ceramics, in particular, pots or vases, are made. the process of the production (That is awkward. You can say "the production process" You also need to note that this is not the only method for making them.) of ceramic pots.

Overall, there are eleven main steps in this process, begining with the collection of raw materials and ending with the finished pots produced.

(You need to group these eleven steps into logical sets. Don't think about the details in the "overall" paragraph. Think of summarizing or grouping the steps into stages, making it simpler.

Overall, the process has three main stages. First, the raw materials are assembled and prepared. Second, these materials are molded and shaped into the form of the final product. Lastly, the pots or vases are fired and finished. They are ready to be sold. There are a total of eleven steps in the entire process. )

In the first stage of the process, steps 1 and 2, raw materials are collected from an appropriate site with good clay deposits using a digger and they are transported by a truck to a factory where they undergo further processing. ~~After that, they~~ In the next stage, steps 3, 4 and 5, the materials, a mixture of clay, sand and small rocks, are crushed into powder and then is mixed with water to form a slurry. Next, the resulting mixture is poured into moulds which have the shape of the end product. Steps 6 and 7 involve drying the moulds ~~to create the shape of pots and dried during~~ from 6 hours to 8 hours, and then breaking open the moulds, removing and assembling the ~~and they are assembled~~ clay pots.

In the next stage (You wrote that there were eleven steps, yet you describe only two of them - the first stage and the next stage. Where did you get eleven?) of the process, steps 8, 9 and 10, these clay pots are placed in a oven (a kiln) and heated at a high temperature of about 1000 degrees celsisus. Following this, the pots are dipped into a colored glaze and fired for a second time. The ~~coloured, put into in a clolour firing to become~~ finished pots and ready for sale for retailers.

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